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讀後感:193Please respect copyright.PENANAP6ifpDlmKN
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抱歉,認真點重來一次w193Please respect copyright.PENANA6IFrqXQhaM
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『感覺上正正是暴風雨前夕』193Please respect copyright.PENANAWGYz0ZgOGb
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內容:193Please respect copyright.PENANAYuGpCm3pJm
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典型(?)的災害前的安穩之時,序幕之章193Please respect copyright.PENANA5SsOU6kdae
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皇室日常生活的章節/公主成長片段193Please respect copyright.PENANArzTkMRLWU0
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不敢說題材有趣,但有很大潛質,期待w
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希望能看見魔法世界的各種w
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比起日常感,更有安穩感193Please respect copyright.PENANAnTEM83loPV
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何謂日常感呢?
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以動漫〈辣妺&恐龍〉、〈K-on〉為例,這些動漫當中,(多數)每一集會有節奏性的起乘轉合,每一集也是可以是一個單獨的故事,就如平常的生活,亦如此,看這些動漫時,那輕鬆的氣氛便是日常感193Please respect copyright.PENANAh8u0dFz1Dz
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可是安穩感是另一樣193Please respect copyright.PENANAZz8xPuIkBM
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安穩,安為穩定,生活安穩,是指一個人生活平平無奇,沒有太大的起承轉合,同時,我們亦會這樣說:193Please respect copyright.PENANAvIBwcVwOa5
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「您生活這麼安穩,怎會明白」193Please respect copyright.PENANAb4AyAYPAVZ
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這處,安穩成了貶義193Please respect copyright.PENANA5AOOS0X5Z4
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這處的安穩感,即帶有懸念的日常,因為缺乏轉,或是在合的位置,沒有落回起的高度,這個浄高度,乃是懸念,也是製造「災難前夕」的感覺
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例子:
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抓周結果+皇兒的忌心 -> 結果未知 + 前言(國家滅亡
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可能性:193Please respect copyright.PENANAy61aujSrfr
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之類
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評文(角色):
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平面角色,個人感覺可以再給多點角色描述,例如幼年時的公主平日生活(更加日常的生活片段,比如用膳(?)總之增加出場率)193Please respect copyright.PENANAH7dnI0oPsE
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角色特性是有,如女僕的裏意,公主的心智發展,有體現到角色特質,若加上更多身體語言描寫更佳
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目前最影響性的角色,個人感覺是父王193Please respect copyright.PENANA1UR5ZI09bB
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父王的角色在平衡日常感之上有很大作用,簡單來說,角色就是個「重國之皇」,嚴肅、沉默寡言,認真的形象,而其「重國」(嚴肅)的感覺,就正正和日常的輕鬆對沖193Please respect copyright.PENANArFT5ZcqIbo
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再者,是全部角色之中,唯一嚴肅的態度存在,特別反映到各種日常中的一絲不輕易
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個人覺得「國家即將滅亡」的感覺,只有父王一人在支撐w193Please respect copyright.PENANAIjZ4pEDVfL
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希望角色能藉轉折發展全面形象,例如父王在面臨國亡之時展現另一面(?
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個人非文學士,所以不作到什麼很建設性的意見
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只能說⋯193Please respect copyright.PENANATRuC7qjEOL
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希望有第一人稱角度描寫w193Please respect copyright.PENANApqIN5k72dY
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還有小心錯字w193Please respect copyright.PENANAvP3CVJHF76
(所以是繆還是謬/周3
(還有,有殘體/周2
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認名字/角色有點困難,希望能[名字+角色職位],這樣子用多點w
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大概就是以上,希望多多加油,期待後續喔193Please respect copyright.PENANAj5f7ijP1zv