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Beta-ing - Readers and Authors
Beta-ing - Readers and Authors
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Thoughts on my story?
#1
Skye Young
Skye Young 7 years ago
If anyone could read my story The Fallen, and give constructive criticism and thoughts on it, I'd love it. Basically a beta reader.
#2
Roanna
Roanna7 years ago
In advance please don't take offence to my opinion, after all this is only one opinion and the other millions of opinions are all different.
I like how you cut straight into the moment of action but a few sentences before mentioning the knock at the warehouse about maybe her condition or how she's holding up would make the readers have a better understanding of the character. The same with Domitri but maybe this time write how they know each other, perhaps the first meeting they had. Other than that the story is suspenseful and should keep readers wanting more, Hope this criticism helps! -Roanna 🤔
Skye Young
Skye Young 7 years ago
@Roanna, Thanks so much for the advice!:)
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