Please read and critique my work. I an desperate to know others opinions on it, to know what I can improve.  I write short stories and poems. To be honest I don't quite know if what I'm calling a poem is actually a poem, but hey its close enough :D

Thank you

If you critique one of mine I'll gladly do a collection of yours. Mine tend to run long, so if you select one I'll do as many of yours to come up to a similar word count.