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Feedback on a weekly story about fantasy "ostrich" riders
johannduarte6 months ago

There is this story of mine that I've been writing for a while. I post a new chapter every week in Wattpad and Sweek, but people there basically just comment to get comments on their own stories... I want to post it weekly here (or maybe more often, if I get to do it right).

My story is set in a world where there are these ostrich-like beings that are almost barbarians. Their tribes fight with each other in an endless war, but one of them makes an alliance with humans and then appear the riders.

The riders are "selected" after races where they compete with each other (mounted). There is a girl that wants to be a rider and fight in the war, and this story is basically about the races she will face.  

For now there is only the first chapters. Please give me your impressions or anything that you find relevant, including grammar (since I'm Brazilian and my first language is Portuguese).

The link is here: https://www.penana.com/story/34668/benti-zai/toc

If you wish, I will also read something you wrote and give a feedback.

Eurepa4 months ago
I could, if you still want someone?
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