終完修正完第一章。改動的地方如下:
角色改名429Please respect copyright.PENANAsvWBEWiNJ5
除了玄牛之外,所有畜牲集團的戰士都重新命名,因為那些陳生、李生、等等的命名,亂來之餘,又不符合作品性格。所以有以下改動:
何大力->南昌一絕429Please respect copyright.PENANA7n9JTDlgUv
劉元山->海柏429Please respect copyright.PENANAnzKex46Vhq
陳生->曉尚429Please respect copyright.PENANAWHXOfz7LJE
李生->曉珀429Please respect copyright.PENANAqQwHK5V68t
嚴生->迎豐429Please respect copyright.PENANAV8MZ4RRpFl
史生->富薈429Please respect copyright.PENANAt6VWYM9vET
林生->傲形429Please respect copyright.PENANAqg3OkoHLvA
黃生->利奧429Please respect copyright.PENANAE1jdSsJ4pt
張生->曉岸
執文法429Please respect copyright.PENANAFr7xoZ55Hm
也許是小弟進步了,現在回看第一章,文法竟是那麼糟糕,是以也大幅修正。429Please respect copyright.PENANAKdDhW3DYIh