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Hope’s Bright!
Co-Writer Cynderz*
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#38
Ray's a Natural Genius?!
Cynderz
Oct 25, 2018
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Cynderz - Thanks, that really helped. I love this chapter more than when a wrote it! :)
2 years agoreply

Frances - Another exciting chapter, the only thing I would look out for is how wordy your paragraphs get. I would go through and eliminate words that serve no purpose like "about to", "beginning", "however". And find a way to shorten your sentences, especially around fight scenes to keep the action moving.
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