If anyone could read my story The Fallen, and give constructive criticism and thoughts on it, I'd love it. Basically a beta reader.

In advance please don't take offence to my opinion, after all this is only one opinion and the other millions of opinions are all different.
I like how you cut straight into the moment of action but a few sentences before mentioning the knock at the warehouse about maybe her condition or how she's holding up would make the readers have a better understanding of the character. The same with Domitri but maybe this time write how they know each other, perhaps the first meeting they had. Other than that the story is suspenseful and should keep readers wanting more, Hope this criticism helps! -Roanna 🤔