Hi,I am Jennifer. This is my frist time to try to write an English short story and English is not my mother language. Can you give me some comments? If you have any questions about Hong Kong or Chinese, please feel free to ask me.  Hope I can help you.  Thank you(❁´ω`❁)
https://m.penana.com/story/23050/tea-time-short-stories/toc

Hello to you Jennifer I have just left a comment on your story, its a rather cute story of love and war. You could possibly spin the idea around and build apon it a bit more, your grammar needs a lot of improvement but for a simple childlike story its ok.
Would you like to get in touch? Do you like Zootopia I am writing a nice story in it and I would love to hear what you think.