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尋人啟事
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Contest Holder 薄荷茶*
Challenger 兀心
Challenger 芙蓉草
Challenger 人羊
Challenger 阿蔥
Challenger 如夢似幻*(至冬)夢之彼
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芙蓉草 - 謝謝你的想法🙏

 之後會注意的^ ^
2 years agoreply

薄荷茶 - 十分喜歡前面鋪排詭異但不心寒的氣氛!
後面展開時,怎麼說呢,有種氣氛沒被接下去的感覺
我想應該是因爲太直接地用對白去展開,或許前面有埋點象徵和線索的話可以串聯得更好。
氣氛真的很棒,只可怕串聯和承接上缺一口氣,很不錯!
2 years agoreply

如夢似幻*(至冬)夢之彼 - 最後一句話,裡頭所隱喻著的情感,到底有多少呢~?
「人已經找到囉,伯母。」

2 years agoreply

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