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第四屆 宋詞挑戰 自然寫景
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Challenger 斟墨客 。 迷
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<<清平樂 • 雨澡>>
By 簡潔
簡潔
Feb 5, 2019
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零兒 零兒
霧飄山亭 霧飄山亭
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點彈綠柳  卧逗花魁秀
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沐髮沾身漸冷  淚隨雨去凝溝

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Comments ( 6 )
簡潔 - 謝謝各位(躬身....
8 months ago ⋅ reply

零兒 - 嗯....最重要的不是平仄啦....（但還是不能錯owo
本詞的動詞和形容詞運用真是活潑生動呢！小的一直想著要如何讓動作生動些（筆記筆記
在六字的部分用了些二二二的排法，對偶甚是工整，看來有非常認真用心的填寫這次的詞牌呢～～（當然其他參賽者也是哦//
話說題目念起來總覺有些奇怪（個人觀感
8 months ago ⋅ reply

簡潔 - 雨澡。。。嗯，因為單字一個"雨", 跟會跟霧搖兄的題目一樣喔，所以不知這樣有没有問題，嘻嘻。

(還是希望平仄不要錯好不好XD
8 months ago ⋅ reply

霧飄山亭 - 好…好強喔！果然是簡潔大大的筆風！每次也讓人吃驚！這次寫雨真的是滿貼切的！用字很優美喔！
8 months ago ⋅ reply

簡潔 - 謝謝你呀霧搖兄~~~
今次可是鼓起很大勇氣來參加的^^"
不用上班，靈感暢通了XD
8 months ago ⋅ reply

霧飄山亭 - @簡潔,XD你一向取材也很廣泛啊！應該不會沒靈感XD加上一直覺得大大你喜歡用一些特別的觀點、特別的字眼寫事物！真的很厲害！

反而我常常沒靈感…XD
8 months ago ⋅ reply
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