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《末世之境》
Writer Mr.m
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  • G: General Audiences
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  • PG-13: Parents Strongly Cautioned
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《末世之境》
《末世之境》
Intro

「這世界瘋掉了嗎?還是只是我們的幻覺?」

「在末世下,你也有想守護的人嗎?」
故事講述一個中三學生Mr.𝕞,佢嘅生活原本就同一個宅男冇太大嘅分別,但係佢完全冇諗過自己嘅生活會從某一日開始逐漸咁改變,可怕嘅係改變咗嘅嘢連主角自己都完全冇發現到,究竟主角嘅命運會係漸漸跌落深淵,屍骨無存,定係奇蹟逃離,大難不死呢。

好啦,同學們,閉起眼睛,好好感受下你依家身處嘅現實世界啦,可能呢次係你最後一次感受咁真實嘅世界啦。接落黎,你係時候進入我Mr.𝕞呢個真真假假,迷迷幻幻嘅小說世界啦!呵呵呵,各位讀者加油啦,我都唔想你地跌落萬仗深淵架~

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Total Reading Time: 5 hours 14 minutes

15 comments

十三郎(多媒體廢作人) - 感謝邀請~~

雖然係粵文,容易直入我個腦,但都真係幾長,我只能夠就表面小小去淺談印象。
我都會覺得係典型嘅香港網遊故事,而且筆者都有好重嘅個人感覺,如果大家都係一班打開機、睇開網故嘅人,可能會好快get到你個狀態,因為呢種故事就係好反傳統,一下就要到位,唔會同讀者拖拖拉拉。
而我最想知道、或者最想係呢個故事到見到嘅係,個角色有咩想做,或是想達到啲咩。因為如果太多支節出現,我會跟甩咗,變成唔知自己睇咩。
6 months agoreply

Mr.m - 好的,這篇作品其實是係小弟嘅第一篇文,大概係想寫中長篇嘅末日,呢個第一季的確有啲冗長,我會喺第二季盡量做改進!大概會寫三部曲嘅文!
6 months agoreply

Mr.m - 前面鋪排太長,正文可以直落#19,呢度會直落劇情,全故大概11萬字,相信呢個篇幅真係有少少長過頭😂
6 months agoreply

Mr.m - 角色會想塑造一個領導者嘅形象,帶領大隊喺末世生存,加上幾條嘅感情線,即係會加入回憶同埋日常。第一季嘅結尾會比較緊湊,敬請期待。
6 months agoreply

Mr.m - 感謝你嘅評論!我盡力改善!
6 months agoreply

十三郎(多媒體廢作人) - @Mr.m,

長其實唔係好大問題,我意思係因為我呢排真係忙到爆廠,欠人好多故債要睇。而且我自己都係長篇連載作者,所以會同明你有幾努力。

講到長篇,如果以你呢個長度去睇,最少10k之內有個完整嘅段落,俾人透一透氣,同時間個故事節奏要好好掌握,唔好一味係咁打同做旁白,讀者係想睇故事發展同人物轉變(最少我係)。

我擔心嘅係玩到10k之後先入主線,唔知讀者會唔會已經走咗。
6 months agoreply

Mr.m - @十三郎(多媒體廢作人),收到!thx!呢排仲開咗新故,同埋第二季都已經向緊你所講嘅方向去做!希望可以比到讀者一個新嘅感受。
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