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艾克斯的魔族征戰史
Writer 零子
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  • G: General Audiences
  • PG: Parental Guidance Suggested
  • PG-13: Parents Strongly Cautioned
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艾克斯的魔族征戰史
艾克斯的魔族征戰史
Intro

人類貪婪將魔族的心靈能量奪走,

魔族為復仇而屠殺人類。

開啟兩邊的戰場,

雙方都以為自己是正義的一方,

認為是對方先攻擊的。

不願和解的兩個世界任由誤會越來越大。

而這樣的故事就從一個魔族人開始……​​​​​​​

番外按這


其實是黑暗搞笑文。

魔族很香耶!快點點進來看啦!​​​​​​​

跪求讀者,求看求按讚求留言回饋。

你的支持,是我成就感的來源^ ^

封面繪師:語漣

Total Reading Time: 3 hours 46 minutes

78 comments

半調 - 這方便漫畫很有幫助, 打了三百年史萊姆的敵人也不多, 少數也可
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半調 - 打了三百年的史莱姆,不知不觉就练滿等



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半調 - 至少我寫不出來.....除了黃文.....我是甚麼都寫不出來的
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零子 - 謝謝^ ^
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2. 少了很明確的敵人, 或是欠少了的小兵對手, 令剛開始的高潮慢慢被沖淡而失了趣, 如果長久的伴侶關係, 少了點驚喜, 例如宿舍可多加個同性戀常打你的興趣, 偷竊你洗澡, 聞你的內褲, 舔你的鞋子之類, 搞笑挺好, 也可代替刻意安排紛爭. 但總要找點樂趣加強主線流動中的色彩

3. 標題用1-10那一類, 讀者想回看會比較吃力, 也少了標題技術分數, 所以, 標題可重點改一下

4. 明確敵人, 增加趣味, 增加紛氣小敵人或趣事, 或撿了一個神秘的皮蛋, 或宿舍有個常脫光的大嬸四出侵犯小鮮肉之類, 還會下藥迷暈

5. 欠了個簡介作楔子, 和少了點懸念令讀者盡快投入故事

但題材非常好, 故事也還在初始階段, 有很大發展空間, 如主角吃草可增強能力, 四處撿草吃如牛又被笑話, 偶然撿了個寶作NPC強伴, 或主角如牛有四個胃, 成長比別人快之類

題材很好, 不要放棄!
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零子 - 謝謝你的建議,上次也有人跟我說過,我缺少了反派,我明白了
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