〈好煩躁!〉
「好煩躁!」他打開煙盒「嘖!」一根煙都沒有了!81Please respect copyright.PENANAFQqhP2xWqQ
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啊啊啊,是她吧!81Please respect copyright.PENANA6xEUUiUftx
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「嘖!」煙盒被捏緊,可還是制止不了不知所措的手,「嘖!現在要幹嘛?什麼都不想幹……」81Please respect copyright.PENANAYelbwa6DFf
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他蹲了下來,搔搔後腦,搔搔他那已經沒幾根的頭髮……「唉,回家吧。」81Please respect copyright.PENANAFvLXlO8EXk
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「卡嚓!」「你吃了嗎?」從廚房的聲音傳來客廳。81Please respect copyright.PENANAWnBZVt78EN
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「怎麼可能吃了?一天才給我十塊錢。」81Please respect copyright.PENANARysynz0xaI
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不滿的眼神瞄了一下,桌上靜靜躺著一根煙。81Please respect copyright.PENANAmGjbPgzCU8
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焦躁的感覺越來越盛,可他始終沒拿起那根煙。81Please respect copyright.PENANA9BAInJR37n
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「嘖!幹嘛又把女兒的照片亂放。」81Please respect copyright.PENANA0zNgMFojys
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注:文中的十塊錢是馬幣81Please respect copyright.PENANA5m5T0Kd0Fr
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〈第一時間〉81Please respect copyright.PENANACoEbK4mnZ0
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「巧克力、煙和林雯欣,你選哪一個?」環繞頸脖的手光潔白皙,連指甲都保養護理,閃著健康的光澤。81Please respect copyright.PENANA7jCfR8Frih
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「那還用說,當然是煙……」81Please respect copyright.PENANA6AaHlqsNRh
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「的隔壁林雯欣。」一口煙味的熱吻,倒增添了放蕩不羈的野性。81Please respect copyright.PENANAiBjD6YesIe
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十年後……81Please respect copyright.PENANAeXJcuQ2tQb
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「拿去。」有些細紋的手但仍掩不住尚算白皙的肌膚。81Please respect copyright.PENANAQnKHjDkGNB
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「怎麼你買兩包?」男人接下疑惑的兩包煙,不是老叫他戒嗎?81Please respect copyright.PENANACygtGBxv46
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「啪!啪!」女人把兩包煙都倒出來還全點上了。81Please respect copyright.PENANACOatFzRKbT
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「咳!咳!」男人忍不住「太嗆了!」81Please respect copyright.PENANA4DPjDp1WT8
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「咳咳……這就是你的林雯欣,咳咳……」生氣的嘴撅了起來……「對不起。」一下又扁了下去……仍然是十年的一口煙味,仍然是第一時間的選擇,只是第一時間。81Please respect copyright.PENANAWi6TYIzo6c
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100 篇回饋活動創挑鏈接:〈省錢的方法〉81Please respect copyright.PENANADW0l3B0N7I
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給 綠茶老司機 的話:81Please respect copyright.PENANA9jceMT4xJR
我覺得〈省錢的方法〉 這篇挺好的,有老夫老妻之間的幽默。我記得我看的時候還蠻期待結尾的,結果的確有給到我驚喜啊,也許是因為我懂這個幽默吧,不過這個梗也還挺不錯的,讀者應該很容易領會。81Please respect copyright.PENANAtBtmfzMPKG
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這篇的精髓我覺得是老夫老妻之間的互動,所以我創作的時候本想朝著老夫老妻去寫。可是這兩天我在糾結要不要更新《賣豆腐的阿公》,因為這樣的速度看來,可能我要花將近兩個月才能完成這個創挑回饋,不知道《阿公》的讀者能不能等?然後也不知道這篇該怎麼寫,兩邊都不懂怎麼寫,我就覺得有些煩躁。於是上面第一篇〈好煩躁!〉我就把心情寫下去了,對應戒菸時那種不知所措,做什麼都不對的煩躁。但是我並不滿意,覺得沒什麼特別,於是又想寫一篇有老夫老妻味道的文。81Please respect copyright.PENANAHJr62vABex
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因為我在吃著巧克力,就有了那句開頭。這是模擬一句浪漫的話「coffee,tea or me」,所以就描繪了一對情侶還在談戀愛時的浪漫。然後十年後,本來還是想著寫老夫老妻的變化,但是寫著寫著這兩人還是有浪漫的愛情,不過還是有諷刺意味。於是這篇就不像〈省錢的方法〉那樣的老夫老妻了。但我滿意了,所以也就沒再繼續寫「老夫老妻」了。81Please respect copyright.PENANARRox6qkY34
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謝謝 綠茶老司機 的參與,希望我們的文也像「老夫老妻」一樣幽默。81Please respect copyright.PENANALPGkdFZuBn
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綠茶老司機 現在都是短篇小說的作品,有些短篇裡頭會穿插一些鼓勵人心的話,有些像〈省錢的方法〉 一樣幽默的風格,我這裡列下稍長一點的,喜歡看短篇小說的朋友可以去看看:81Please respect copyright.PENANAXLpZYYwGX6
【短篇小說】不快樂小姐81Please respect copyright.PENANAhaVtfKAX0y
【短篇小說】花房姑娘81Please respect copyright.PENANAKBVhySaQGB
【短篇小說】陪伴機器人81Please respect copyright.PENANA7ssjummbcV
【短篇小說】渣男養成計劃81Please respect copyright.PENANAtiKsBVRD7f
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