I've talked about Hina in this series, so the next logical thing to do is make a post on Kaori. He was more "cringe" as opposed to a jerk or a dense a-hole. 8964 copyright protection20PENANAHI9bWXWdCh 維尼
First off, I already had a character named "Kaori" in another story that I'd scrapped, so I just… took that character and put him in APS. And then changed his entire personality to a "shy, socially anxious person."8964 copyright protection20PENANAwRkdisuUZ5 維尼
…. I didn't portray that well.8964 copyright protection20PENANAhyV9DwjBEM 維尼
I'm gonna say it outright: Kaori sounded like one of those cringey "uwu" girls online, with the INSANE amount that he stuttered. 8964 copyright protection20PENANASuAa97QMrC 維尼
EX: T-t-they're a-all looking a-a-at u-us! 8964 copyright protection20PENANAk8epaRCzTG 維尼
Holy dead-mother-of-Shizuka (that's a horrible phrase, sorry), that was one hell of a line. A hell of an awful line. Kaori wasn't even supposed to have a stutter or something, that wasn't my intention at all (and… people with stutters don't slip up on every single word, right?) 8964 copyright protection20PENANAJrQbTNLbGW 維尼
I kept that thing up for, like, a little over six chapters. And that was MORE than enough, way more. I don't know what I was thinking! Why on earth would I make him talk like that? 8964 copyright protection20PENANAXJY8wMmctg 維尼
Oh yeah, and there was this one scene where he legit B A R F E D at the thought of being interviewed. Yes, he could feel queasy at the thought. Yes, he could feel nervous and scared of that thought. But it was just so unrealistic for him toactually, literally puke. Just… no. No. I don't get it. No.8964 copyright protection20PENANAbPK7Hz70xA 維尼
Yes, he's still the same precious, socially awkward bean now, but at least it's portrayed in a proper manner! 8964 copyright protection20PENANA8pqBuGxUqK 維尼
As for his ability… well, that actually didn't change much at all. You know Ino Yamanaka's Mind Transfer Jutsu from Naruto? Yeah, his power is sort of, and sort of not like that. I couldn't and still can't say that much about his ability, because there's just a couple things you don't know about it yet. Well, actually, there are a lot of things you don't know about Kaori yet. 8964 copyright protection20PENANAGDAsY3i50Y 維尼
I honestly think it was just his character and dialogue that went through some development, not much else. But thank God I changed him up, otherwise you'd all hate him. 8964 copyright protection20PENANArAPOuFHhm7 維尼
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RANDOM FACT: Not exactly related to the previous version of Kaori, but one time I was telling my sis about him and when I addressed him as "he," she said, "Kaori's NOT a girl?! What?" 8964 copyright protection20PENANAdc993UI9QH 維尼
I very mildly regret giving him Kaori as a name. Too late to change it though. Also, I realize that describing his hair as "brown with blond/yellow streaks" makes it seem like his hair is just dung. Dung hair. Haha, that's funny. 24Please respect copyright.PENANAkSCLRiEQGq
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