Hey ladies and gents! Please critique my story:

Title: Payback By The Spirits

Synopsis: If you are a believer in African Spirituality and have a curiosity for what Ancestors are capable of, then hear this: once upon a time, criminals decided to pick a fight with and rob a man. Oblivious were they to the reality that this is a man who practices traditions that keep him in touch with his Ancestors.

Read and witness the ill-fate that befalls them for assaulting such a man.

Two chapters

Complete

Link: https://www.penana.com/story/107233/payback-by-the-spirits

Hi authors and litfans

Writing my first epic fantasy novel. Would love some feedback.

Title: The Tower In The Forest
Chapters: 6

Synopsis: Simply put, what if the protagonist was not meant to save the land but destroy it. This first book explores the series of events that put him on that path.

Content Advisory: Some mature themes

Status: Ongoing

Links:
Penana: https://www.penana.com/story/108957/the-tower-in-the-forest
Wattpad: https://www.wattpad.com/story/315246608-the-tower-in-the-forest

All reviews and feedback are welcome and appreciated.

Hey everyone! Please check out my latest short story entitled Surprising a Thief.
https://www.penana.com/user/146786/aria-devereaux/portfolio


Noelle is involved with a nefarious group of people that has a penchant for stealing. Now, she has a job to do and it includes recruiting a man from her past. When an unexpected encounter turns into something more, she's left with a heavy consequence.

Hi guys I hope you read my story https://www.penana.com/story/111148/my-perfect-life

Halter

Hi, everyone! It's my first day and my novel.

The Story Of Gabra

A beautiful man whose his life is better than Netflix dramas.😉😉😉


Please drop by, thank you😘😘

HEY!! I just finished part one and part 2 of a new series that I'm doing, if you guys could check it out and tell me what you think with any opinions on how to better it it would be greatly appreciated

Cursed Melody
Currently: 6 chapters
Merida Lykos aka Melody always dreamed for a mate that was similar to the charming prince she read in books as a child. As the only child of Alpha Peter, she knows that it's her birthright to lead the pack one day and that it'll be essential for a powerful mate to be at her side. When an odd twist of fate leads to a chance meeting and one impulsive decision tears them apart, Merida and Melody go on a four year hunt, desperately trying to save her mate before she loses them forever.

After a horrific incident results in the loss of her humanity and innocence, Mia Agrinya runs away from home and from the people she loved at the age of sixteen. Now, four years later, she struggles trying maintain a normal life with a crazed beast inside her that she can barely tame. When a sudden encounter with her once adorable, now feisty and alluring, step sister drags her back into the strange world she'd abandoned, Mia becomes faced with a hard past that threatens the fragile balance between her and Madness.

When a dark presence takes the form of a once trusted friend and a secret curse threatens the peaceful balance of the pack, Melody and Madness become faced with a reality neither of them would expect and feelings one of them might not be able to handle.

https://m.penana.com/story/127391/cursed-melody/toc

Devil's Advocates

Genre: Contemporary fantasy

Three years after the dissaperence of Rose's father and the loss of her voice and memories she had stapled together something resembling her old life until she was introduced to a world of actual magic existing between the cracks of her city. Forced to come to terms quickly with her new reality or risk losing the only lead she may have to find her father she joins the Devil's Advocates a team of young adults fumbling through life. All led by an ambiguous old man who goes by the moniker Joker. Follow Rose, Kairo, Lonan, Benni, Lobo, and Ermellia as they survive the twisted games the city has in store playing their roles as the Devil's Advocates.

*Blurb*

I felt myself begin to sway the thirst grew stronger matching the intensity of the music. When I couldn't  take much more a set of drums joined the symphony. I felt each bang vibrate through my skull I knew I had to drink. Greedily I tip the cup back swallowing what I thought would be warm but to my surprise, the thick liquid was chilled. I shut my eyes tight it seemed the music stopped the moment the last drop passed my lips. The thirst was gone and my head felt steady if anything I had a light buzz.
https://www.wattpad.com/story/162597849?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=Bubblegumgabber&wp_originator=%2BOXUutscRAhHBWhQREcLZuR80G5sXwxZfNKLFXf9GdhpNt9htAfqaxgXZIZ%2BH%2BqQR4efCyqDLEyxAZnPUjoZIlK4Jr0cp76%2FRUquQgQgC5d%2BnmecOOVTAOT5dLsJKrQL

Check out my new work "Graceless"
Though only 1 chap is published... I promise more will come!

https://www.penana.com/article/1103854


its an intro.... (a lil spoiler :-))
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Just a tiny spark in her eyes....

And they become captivated

She may appear to be mundane and earthly

But she's the biggest predator disguised in a flower.

Yap that's right! SHE CAN MAKE ANYONE FALL IN LOVE WITH HER..

BUT SADLY ITS ONLY BECAUSE OF HER POWER.

Now she wonders would she find REAL love???

When all man are prey to her DIVINE POWER!!!