首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。598Please respect copyright.PENANA5RRjpqO3No
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---598Please respect copyright.PENANAfwkrwH8PJa
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。598Please respect copyright.PENANA2bnmd0e8e6
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。598Please respect copyright.PENANAbJ0pvAZTc7
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。598Please respect copyright.PENANAqW1HN11TaY
而這篇在下章就是如此。598Please respect copyright.PENANApitBOEEWJi
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林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。598Please respect copyright.PENANAgCLsaiTTuU
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。598Please respect copyright.PENANAPxGOWjBuhP
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。598Please respect copyright.PENANALCuRxXmQwo
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。598Please respect copyright.PENANAhiAQ6QomTG
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。598Please respect copyright.PENANA6BAzRHmnrR
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。598Please respect copyright.PENANAti4LVCfTNv
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。598Please respect copyright.PENANAIlrQpjIKN9
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。598Please respect copyright.PENANAPjdLoAhHKJ
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANASKp35HQhbi
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。598Please respect copyright.PENANAinEGNGSxwy
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林598Please respect copyright.PENANAs9clBbTyOB
這故是關鍵的人物598Please respect copyright.PENANAdV6VWM0nq0
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活598Please respect copyright.PENANA2Qu1bWCHjp
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言598Please respect copyright.PENANAWfrd9mV3YV
598Please respect copyright.PENANAjgrFNPlDKH
「我們的孩子」598Please respect copyright.PENANAvM1wud8rgG
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整598Please respect copyright.PENANA5FeyVmB3fN
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。598Please respect copyright.PENANAI87nDKkBox
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後598Please respect copyright.PENANANoXOFIlCsR
也肯定還會有新的故事起點598Please respect copyright.PENANAqbVVTIRzhU
然而天下無不散的宴席598Please respect copyright.PENANA89aWRg4WpY
我們本次故事便到此結束598Please respect copyright.PENANAZT49tXFqp0
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。598Please respect copyright.PENANA8l450LzNFp
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。598Please respect copyright.PENANAO4NoOdEqUW
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。598Please respect copyright.PENANAeoqTx2Fwyr
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。598Please respect copyright.PENANAgUm5iLK8bP
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。598Please respect copyright.PENANAF6ibhGuY2O
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。598Please respect copyright.PENANA1oLJi40CvD
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。598Please respect copyright.PENANAqzj2cgQ3Q8
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。598Please respect copyright.PENANAM6Q1gsryLI
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。598Please respect copyright.PENANAcqk9zr2vLe
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANA6d5MUcpk1x
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANAHWJRnambhb
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。598Please respect copyright.PENANA6IJwUnsIiX
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。598Please respect copyright.PENANAlzyCkrIU6o
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。598Please respect copyright.PENANAVy7Yc1IuBj
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。598Please respect copyright.PENANAfH1ey2YXLa
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANACBJZSvhVve
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。598Please respect copyright.PENANAZa5e80oUTh
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?598Please respect copyright.PENANAQKQ6xspii1
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」598Please respect copyright.PENANAkuMVjwFjtS
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)598Please respect copyright.PENANArScctqFGtD
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。598Please respect copyright.PENANAea7TMONQ4R
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。598Please respect copyright.PENANAHLuPRdoHL9
而故事線轉回到了從前。598Please respect copyright.PENANAJCkMimUBDy
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。598Please respect copyright.PENANAlhUD7CGFxx
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。598Please respect copyright.PENANARnb9cvD3Dy
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?598Please respect copyright.PENANAkC7c9AI1Qo
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?598Please respect copyright.PENANAo5cRtHAve1
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。598Please respect copyright.PENANA8XLday0BU3
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。598Please respect copyright.PENANAQY0K74LGEc
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。598Please respect copyright.PENANAWksbducFyz
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。598Please respect copyright.PENANAWW1PnW5wsE
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。598Please respect copyright.PENANAzjoL8DP0dE
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。598Please respect copyright.PENANApN9U5UosmV
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。598Please respect copyright.PENANAfzNQM3DB3T
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?598Please respect copyright.PENANAyawryUhUXW
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
598Please respect copyright.PENANA6kEoZNf9rO
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。598Please respect copyright.PENANAQKvCe89HR6
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。598Please respect copyright.PENANA3uwqgb8bK2
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAUmdxrM3XzA
這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。598Please respect copyright.PENANAJNffQCWVa5
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。598Please respect copyright.PENANADOl9V7puuM
至此,幾年前分別以後。598Please respect copyright.PENANAUXvWre8I8w
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。598Please respect copyright.PENANAVZCZCljLrO
598Please respect copyright.PENANAP9Swz2mDNL
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。598Please respect copyright.PENANAc1pyfzBdz6
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。598Please respect copyright.PENANANAQhaehgwy
也是是疾病纏身。598Please respect copyright.PENANAisjkWe1LuK
也迫不得已,離開了他。598Please respect copyright.PENANAuD34pJ1nla
598Please respect copyright.PENANAvH9ZdL0K79
贈我,是一個約定。598Please respect copyright.PENANAtqC7YQZfjj
一個約定券的約定。 598Please respect copyright.PENANAWaSgRnt0rP
而再見之時,人事已非。598Please respect copyright.PENANAn4GD4HqExX
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?598Please respect copyright.PENANAU5OnmOqG2h
598Please respect copyright.PENANACcbOXKwdnL
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。598Please respect copyright.PENANAI899ztMOoh
或許,再見不遠。 598Please respect copyright.PENANAhjLagW3UiJ
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAK8xx92u3zx
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
598Please respect copyright.PENANADc1AP1FiGN
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。598Please respect copyright.PENANAvdmzr0kexu
就像青春微酸甜那般。598Please respect copyright.PENANAT35rDL5FAH
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。598Please respect copyright.PENANAC4Mq9rSoUl
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。598Please respect copyright.PENANAr2pifRpbgg
598Please respect copyright.PENANA4ltSuyRiZz
「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANAkD23TuVAUr
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。598Please respect copyright.PENANAufq8l6Cxv7
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。598Please respect copyright.PENANALBRKeNIdFB
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。598Please respect copyright.PENANAiFeXofVZQI
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。598Please respect copyright.PENANA2vhv59UDXB
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。598Please respect copyright.PENANAisKDZPACa8
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。598Please respect copyright.PENANAyMz9ZQ4c7O
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。598Please respect copyright.PENANAzqGt4rhxSH
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANA7EZWMsIWPu
598Please respect copyright.PENANA1Tm0FOdeC7
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAYAteYyzLNc
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。598Please respect copyright.PENANAMUPg9kBiio
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAoPu1StPWFv
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。598Please respect copyright.PENANAW1E9x4BrLf
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。598Please respect copyright.PENANAgfqErXgCUB
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。598Please respect copyright.PENANATQKl3fqsmm
598Please respect copyright.PENANA4TPi29PZS9
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。598Please respect copyright.PENANA3ZeTCNtN0Z
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
598Please respect copyright.PENANArY2wT6MKBM
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。598Please respect copyright.PENANAitS4AEomQ4
598Please respect copyright.PENANAsz4G0i1GMe
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。598Please respect copyright.PENANApUQFCUiYON
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。598Please respect copyright.PENANAgLFCFr8Ict
因那悸動。598Please respect copyright.PENANAJXGCjQAUzo
往往竟是那瞬間。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAGodUcfxZrH
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。598Please respect copyright.PENANAtPTgsWeqGz
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。598Please respect copyright.PENANAPVUFdKtdRU
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。598Please respect copyright.PENANAdW8HTh6bGR
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?598Please respect copyright.PENANAFiUXfdnPZf
598Please respect copyright.PENANAvBFTftIdiF
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。598Please respect copyright.PENANAnaUvaaGVxy
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。598Please respect copyright.PENANA6wxcJNbJbp
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
598Please respect copyright.PENANAZP9U9c4769
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANASPsDu5FAJV
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAyu3f8Zpc5f
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAHPEz0qgazE
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAyXiYpWeMmp
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAivzHy8FHDq
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANADHmdl5FKHg
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAH5QJee8gtv
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANA4VxOErt6An
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANA1BCPdulUzX
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
598Please respect copyright.PENANAWXAhjSSNwi
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
598Please respect copyright.PENANApyrcssWCzs
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
598Please respect copyright.PENANAyfrkO1wlET
新詩類
598Please respect copyright.PENANAUZhwBBpDW2
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧598Please respect copyright.PENANA515nce4XmF
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍598Please respect copyright.PENANAAh3AlxjMXO
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)598Please respect copyright.PENANAA4AG4BR6hv
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單598Please respect copyright.PENANAvBTaUbHBoU
而是是人在食用時能入口即化598Please respect copyright.PENANAkvpuUs6Qxc
598Please respect copyright.PENANA8bT8q8on9D
598Please respect copyright.PENANANyfQ2LfBN9
「嘗試把心臟調慢」598Please respect copyright.PENANA2eQr3jCbgp
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久598Please respect copyright.PENANARnigQn5MQk
使人不會因為時間的洪流598Please respect copyright.PENANAJNVTqz0ZkZ
失去了炙熱598Please respect copyright.PENANAVfM6gMgx3Y
598Please respect copyright.PENANANrJ0U6e51q
598Please respect copyright.PENANADO8xVeUuOC
詩名為《夏,冬眠》598Please respect copyright.PENANASXdksNRn6k
但夏季怎麼會有雪598Please respect copyright.PENANAhvDmmPLRFF
令人加以反思598Please respect copyright.PENANAS9sDd70w2X
雪季不該有的畫面598Please respect copyright.PENANAzIYcCUoFzU
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏598Please respect copyright.PENANA7loUAyycpX
598Please respect copyright.PENANAuLR5lW5DxZ
或許598Please respect copyright.PENANAdJU9IFXEXX
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣598Please respect copyright.PENANAVzDSyFeqU1
即便是來年598Please respect copyright.PENANAqBjp7RrfWP
之後的每一年都依然如此
598Please respect copyright.PENANAjlNdDBXNEh
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。598Please respect copyright.PENANA7QScZYnbhB
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。598Please respect copyright.PENANA36eDb8KyA4
598Please respect copyright.PENANAtIjoUHs4Yp
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。598Please respect copyright.PENANAaVM8ddAVnp
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。598Please respect copyright.PENANAA3gIu7EytU
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。598Please respect copyright.PENANAnHfp0UC7hC
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。598Please respect copyright.PENANA6fJr7FEKZa
598Please respect copyright.PENANACjE3vR1QnY
景物依然,妳卻不然。598Please respect copyright.PENANA8qiNkX3d87
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。598Please respect copyright.PENANAhPmZt99moq
更多的是此刻的情殤。598Please respect copyright.PENANA26CLMtzLDE
598Please respect copyright.PENANACuFxWehrYg
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。598Please respect copyright.PENANAEIC8IkIldA
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANAIp1JwQLWEE
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANA5xIypj5j1I
598Please respect copyright.PENANA5U0UQU5T7E
598Please respect copyright.PENANACX0GVGkDaJ
夏季,這絢麗。598Please respect copyright.PENANAsO1uxX8AYJ
如曇花一現的煙花。598Please respect copyright.PENANAJULZhP8k57
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
598Please respect copyright.PENANA6rwlXiRklT
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。598Please respect copyright.PENANAR7XtQcNncm
同如起、轉、合三處意境。598Please respect copyright.PENANAdHXImakVTQ
598Please respect copyright.PENANAYyoSzQELSm
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。598Please respect copyright.PENANAfk0u3I4F6V
598Please respect copyright.PENANAM2yIfV6GYd
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。598Please respect copyright.PENANAEWPzMo9lws
598Please respect copyright.PENANAuKZk4h3XFv
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
598Please respect copyright.PENANA0KmGbhfY8N
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴598Please respect copyright.PENANA3V0efQOw1e
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開598Please respect copyright.PENANALB0lP9i0MX
598Please respect copyright.PENANAPow64D27un
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿598Please respect copyright.PENANAX1BZFT5TKZ
句中江畔相隨598Please respect copyright.PENANAthcf546cgG
卻又未知天意是何在598Please respect copyright.PENANAh0jP2Bvq45
598Please respect copyright.PENANAGDccNKwVkQ
即便是狂嘯 悲歌598Please respect copyright.PENANAKGNDlUTZso
天上繁星 銀河598Please respect copyright.PENANAdfj47Y7IMF
也僅是萬千世界的一粟598Please respect copyright.PENANAKuqywbGnbb
卻找不出能取掉你的其一598Please respect copyright.PENANAOSBRURMVSO
598Please respect copyright.PENANAeiUYZjHyJi
從回到閣樓598Please respect copyright.PENANAQpms3cnlB5
又再次漫步獨醉598Please respect copyright.PENANAnMTdepr76L
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉598Please respect copyright.PENANA2n0kBtMNoj
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉598Please respect copyright.PENANAyTPkQn2lIX
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了598Please respect copyright.PENANAj4YUG21QTB
598Please respect copyright.PENANAXxyGsW9rsW
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路598Please respect copyright.PENANA3E1OdwnsO1
也不過只是再次三世598Please respect copyright.PENANATHnFrg44wv
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
598Please respect copyright.PENANAf4kE5FJfMn
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。598Please respect copyright.PENANAkyAJcBaLxh
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。598Please respect copyright.PENANAwaL9ceHpIQ
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。598Please respect copyright.PENANAEetNzp2UNR
(感謝科普。)598Please respect copyright.PENANAPLdUfaJSGn
598Please respect copyright.PENANAN525GkFG2O
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。598Please respect copyright.PENANANHAEmRBvwm
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。598Please respect copyright.PENANAFk9rhYnsdE
598Please respect copyright.PENANAHlJpHmYkM9
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。598Please respect copyright.PENANACwWUPN3nEd
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。598Please respect copyright.PENANAFnZF2l0I6I
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。598Please respect copyright.PENANAvlst4duItp
598Please respect copyright.PENANAVuYLRbg9gt
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。598Please respect copyright.PENANAKTk42lH820
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。598Please respect copyright.PENANABFD2hnh4ci
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。598Please respect copyright.PENANAwKp5SUWm8t
598Please respect copyright.PENANA9zkvf14E55
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
598Please respect copyright.PENANA0dYszrrHDS
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAnSYngAQnHq
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。598Please respect copyright.PENANAYhYDfSoyxo
598Please respect copyright.PENANAMlqeo0HryJ
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。598Please respect copyright.PENANAGXYvd8k8Jd
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
598Please respect copyright.PENANA7N2uzMFcI6
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?598Please respect copyright.PENANA2XSCtQrKPa
598Please respect copyright.PENANAPvF4AILRtq
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。598Please respect copyright.PENANAtVmM5FVCPv
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。598Please respect copyright.PENANAXb7zSSAXCk
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。598Please respect copyright.PENANAiOAsrklod5
598Please respect copyright.PENANAULgXkvljZ8
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」598Please respect copyright.PENANAZhZylEvFbS
598Please respect copyright.PENANAomKQtUpfqE
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。598Please respect copyright.PENANAol64zIVmXj
598Please respect copyright.PENANAailc93IFBx
前世,已放下。598Please respect copyright.PENANAZySBgnKFs7
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。598Please respect copyright.PENANAb7dX95cMaU
598Please respect copyright.PENANA17iNrzkcWv
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAErUV9b5ngu
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。598Please respect copyright.PENANA7G9bFXLSCz
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:598Please respect copyright.PENANA5qYuSvWvjY
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」598Please respect copyright.PENANA0ANIUHRTIY
598Please respect copyright.PENANA4DJiZbaMnD
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。598Please respect copyright.PENANAh2idLoK4C4
越是得來不易。598Please respect copyright.PENANAeNeT9Bk50q
598Please respect copyright.PENANAr5393jakze
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。598Please respect copyright.PENANAieqB9KrJMZ
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。598Please respect copyright.PENANA21BuMjUUyJ
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
598Please respect copyright.PENANAXikK5UdeuI
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。598Please respect copyright.PENANAr0fP3nKwpI
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。598Please respect copyright.PENANAkcLvUIji5M
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。598Please respect copyright.PENANAFDoBcY6Roc
如我們未盡的緣分這般。598Please respect copyright.PENANAMIjaxOeo0p
598Please respect copyright.PENANArBL00wNaXc
598Please respect copyright.PENANAGfwOUSLVQt
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。598Please respect copyright.PENANAjNjLSCxHPz
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。598Please respect copyright.PENANAexCLDdKPZM
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。598Please respect copyright.PENANAeKSE467OzD
598Please respect copyright.PENANAaDbE7gHzuC
598Please respect copyright.PENANAdzkEsfyJQi
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。598Please respect copyright.PENANAJj1y8p5ozr
我並不知情。598Please respect copyright.PENANAGntCum9Njv
也不再無從得知。598Please respect copyright.PENANAMBIMW5JDs3
598Please respect copyright.PENANAghEyOMcvST
598Please respect copyright.PENANAaEfyH5UPgj
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。598Please respect copyright.PENANAXll69edPVS
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」598Please respect copyright.PENANA9aXsHVqqTM
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。598Please respect copyright.PENANAB9asGqvTEb
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。598Please respect copyright.PENANAyr7q4pvGvF
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視598Please respect copyright.PENANAp6dWFALxcf
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛598Please respect copyright.PENANA9RK7rjT491
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待598Please respect copyright.PENANAAak6LPKXyG
598Please respect copyright.PENANARUv4yE56Ev
而在萬里無雲的日常598Please respect copyright.PENANAsm6ZwwHPlM
大地照耀出了你的光芒598Please respect copyright.PENANALIfUPGzU6M
只想著短暫沒有你的存在598Please respect copyright.PENANA0hYuP5TAiE
與緬懷影子的並行598Please respect copyright.PENANArZxefJJt0R
598Please respect copyright.PENANAFrhAXoApXN
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手598Please respect copyright.PENANA57A1FNICka
敲響了人群一日的序幕598Please respect copyright.PENANAb6lbSpXHPz
島與海598Please respect copyright.PENANAF8C4m8dDjS
又為何區分你、我呢598Please respect copyright.PENANAtPEZThmK0i
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你598Please respect copyright.PENANAUOhlIBpGEM
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隨著四季的變化598Please respect copyright.PENANASqY2Qnykfr
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時598Please respect copyright.PENANAQNC1nm1ObD
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩598Please respect copyright.PENANAw3luy0BcpU
詩意要較為薄弱598Please respect copyright.PENANAmsljr8TUZv
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分598Please respect copyright.PENANA5qcnli0ZhR
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感598Please respect copyright.PENANABptdXC5q9R
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。598Please respect copyright.PENANAot6tWSBeMB
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。598Please respect copyright.PENANACpIXG3Naks
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。598Please respect copyright.PENANAzrE4LW9NkI
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。598Please respect copyright.PENANA5pVkzF4dif
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。598Please respect copyright.PENANAEnIF3laDOV
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。598Please respect copyright.PENANAQoG5yakZvY
598Please respect copyright.PENANAN9jRjj63E2
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。598Please respect copyright.PENANAg2ij6wkrTN
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。598Please respect copyright.PENANAasny1XrXox
每個人的角度皆為不同。598Please respect copyright.PENANA7IJHTmUpVo
598Please respect copyright.PENANAQwic9fOUn7
有人感受深刻,598Please respect copyright.PENANAo38DSWXJ45
有人無感,598Please respect copyright.PENANATTjSiDrpqO
各有差異。598Please respect copyright.PENANAYX6v1M65ip
598Please respect copyright.PENANAiWKbZ4Mihw
而我僅是那茫茫人海中,598Please respect copyright.PENANAyrue9omMhM
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。598Please respect copyright.PENANArB6QkmVCTw
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。598Please respect copyright.PENANA3NeHAHSCx6
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。598Please respect copyright.PENANAoJZCPXhcWo
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。598Please respect copyright.PENANAzVYHBHnwz6
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。598Please respect copyright.PENANA9ykHbtbH5b
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。598Please respect copyright.PENANAtrzYkQbFcL
598Please respect copyright.PENANAsiMYsF4eXh
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。598Please respect copyright.PENANAGAOY5JBvXU
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。598Please respect copyright.PENANATiEnp73Xzf
598Please respect copyright.PENANA63U1PCdKhr
也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。598Please respect copyright.PENANAlkpSKVtEUe
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。598Please respect copyright.PENANAr1Q5Qijphl
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。598Please respect copyright.PENANAaVBUnqUPs1
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。598Please respect copyright.PENANArae1uXv8iX
598Please respect copyright.PENANAv7YFKig4XX
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七夕。598Please respect copyright.PENANAdvRfVWBpx8
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。598Please respect copyright.PENANAqahCL28W4J
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。598Please respect copyright.PENANAx7KjzznGFB
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩598Please respect copyright.PENANAkuxcA7HAtJ
用道地口吻方式呈現598Please respect copyright.PENANA3AfLGoFcMS
別有一番令人感同身受的味道598Please respect copyright.PENANAi3tXq0Skt7
598Please respect copyright.PENANArofRj4ngO0
華麗的新詩固然有深沈598Please respect copyright.PENANAxlKq5NA8cT
反覆咀嚼的口感598Please respect copyright.PENANAL8NQTnkiXk
但相較於打油詩598Please respect copyright.PENANAsKCU2KZmj1
卻更能反映生活上的記趣598Please respect copyright.PENANAS1pzXzPsHY
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!598Please respect copyright.PENANA9uKGHEi6Av
598Please respect copyright.PENANAczf4n4QEtM
夏季沉悶、炙熱598Please respect copyright.PENANAvic1PqBSuF
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情598Please respect copyright.PENANA7VvGMUlr7f
保持理性與忍耐598Please respect copyright.PENANAaCnWFLVHXD
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
598Please respect copyright.PENANA8fMoQczv12
抬起頭來598Please respect copyright.PENANAcSKNySV1CR
深深吸一口氣598Please respect copyright.PENANA0urbNuzNhC
靜下來看一下周遭的事物598Please respect copyright.PENANAl1mrozHAoh
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。598Please respect copyright.PENANAG3s0aBiwZG
一種相思,兩處閒愁。598Please respect copyright.PENANA2fFVELTVpF
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。598Please respect copyright.PENANAu0ShWjVDAY
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?598Please respect copyright.PENANAxf9aIFRGYg
598Please respect copyright.PENANAvxkb524Vip
獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。598Please respect copyright.PENANAZaBRjXbdbl
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。598Please respect copyright.PENANACsxxGU8bJr
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 598Please respect copyright.PENANAuE9zUfIvFJ
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。598Please respect copyright.PENANAfy56HvMA3p
598Please respect copyright.PENANAqNikojsc0k
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。598Please respect copyright.PENANAH10LMbbT7N
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。598Please respect copyright.PENANAEgg4BRjCeZ
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我們仍未可知。598Please respect copyright.PENANAZW94IaVBuY
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~598Please respect copyright.PENANABVodZpGZM8