首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。512Please respect copyright.PENANARwvb7P9RNw
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---512Please respect copyright.PENANAsX751s3YkF
512Please respect copyright.PENANACqImU9wzzZ
又一刻,轉折接踵而來。512Please respect copyright.PENANAyoI6zPmjvb
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。512Please respect copyright.PENANAJb9EuKcS2P
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。512Please respect copyright.PENANASBT7NBXUqp
而這篇在下章就是如此。512Please respect copyright.PENANAXbsXcC8nmM
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林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1WeGnIXPtF
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。512Please respect copyright.PENANA8I6DGbjbQl
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。512Please respect copyright.PENANA529DFZ0fvz
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。512Please respect copyright.PENANAFMdug0r7aJ
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。512Please respect copyright.PENANAH8EXesvv2f
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。512Please respect copyright.PENANA3HWNmcfIdi
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。512Please respect copyright.PENANAxOILlQ9aDF
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。512Please respect copyright.PENANAwR63uxTRJs
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAJ4ctcrtb7O
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。512Please respect copyright.PENANAMs5DA9Pr9C
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林512Please respect copyright.PENANAqTP6f32mpD
這故是關鍵的人物512Please respect copyright.PENANANhTwXWw1Rw
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活512Please respect copyright.PENANAtQKMEYeWdc
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言512Please respect copyright.PENANAe2yVGbgfSS
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「我們的孩子」512Please respect copyright.PENANA8tbJTF28Zr
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整512Please respect copyright.PENANAwcOc7CqW96
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。512Please respect copyright.PENANAclXIP2J5Om
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後512Please respect copyright.PENANAvGQ0RLS6ug
也肯定還會有新的故事起點512Please respect copyright.PENANAUhLvtY8bV5
然而天下無不散的宴席512Please respect copyright.PENANAKKgqAVWZP7
我們本次故事便到此結束512Please respect copyright.PENANAgBX6yeXE13
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。512Please respect copyright.PENANApH14yKH9g4
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。512Please respect copyright.PENANAWbVLWlfbMT
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。512Please respect copyright.PENANAgghn0Vka66
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。512Please respect copyright.PENANAAMC2R4X9JT
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。512Please respect copyright.PENANALCYMJSLU7v
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqTvJC7wP2J
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。512Please respect copyright.PENANA9KqtFzBtSE
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。512Please respect copyright.PENANAvoASUdnRVV
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。512Please respect copyright.PENANAnQPnbs2bKm
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAQW0GY7QoRY
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAIrvsFrFIwn
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。512Please respect copyright.PENANAofLTmbv8Ht
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。512Please respect copyright.PENANA0ltJHs4pb6
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。512Please respect copyright.PENANAK3rye74NwN
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。512Please respect copyright.PENANAxp6CggJwHl
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAK50TUuDOCT
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。512Please respect copyright.PENANAPd2Nuu8bSF
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?512Please respect copyright.PENANAxPx4y49EjX
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」512Please respect copyright.PENANAkEsDy1J2gp
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)512Please respect copyright.PENANAlHx6zpCek5
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。512Please respect copyright.PENANAtAN0096Gjh
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。512Please respect copyright.PENANApNYKYPTfnV
而故事線轉回到了從前。512Please respect copyright.PENANA0Jw8SmSG9L
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。512Please respect copyright.PENANAzQ4U2rY5gZ
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。512Please respect copyright.PENANAVWDICiJsUK
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?512Please respect copyright.PENANAct1Z1u3IUu
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?512Please respect copyright.PENANAjHFOSYb1qs
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。512Please respect copyright.PENANA0kwCDKoV9I
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。512Please respect copyright.PENANADJe0JnQSEL
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。512Please respect copyright.PENANAA7apipYcT8
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。512Please respect copyright.PENANAPnGJxCv3bx
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。512Please respect copyright.PENANAZF39s2STLA
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。512Please respect copyright.PENANABzP0w3tWSG
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。512Please respect copyright.PENANAOzJqjogmZY
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?512Please respect copyright.PENANAZ4Bg0dOlvz
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
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告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。512Please respect copyright.PENANAuaQlJ4VG5D
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。512Please respect copyright.PENANAWx65agmIK3
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
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這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。512Please respect copyright.PENANAd4c72vT1Em
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。512Please respect copyright.PENANAdxbVUqcLWF
至此,幾年前分別以後。512Please respect copyright.PENANAXv2UYL0TiL
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。512Please respect copyright.PENANAjEsmlksVW6
512Please respect copyright.PENANAT5q8wDFrLb
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。512Please respect copyright.PENANA8bOKZWddt6
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。512Please respect copyright.PENANA0BzSUh9cYd
也是是疾病纏身。512Please respect copyright.PENANA9Jsg4MaDOX
也迫不得已,離開了他。512Please respect copyright.PENANAm8MKysgqIv
512Please respect copyright.PENANAh69fQj0vsp
贈我,是一個約定。512Please respect copyright.PENANAGj8zhzgGFq
一個約定券的約定。 512Please respect copyright.PENANA4mxcXKWnRi
而再見之時,人事已非。512Please respect copyright.PENANAaxF2ySOODY
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?512Please respect copyright.PENANASAaZiEkQBN
512Please respect copyright.PENANA44s0GCO7dH
512Please respect copyright.PENANAZvZP65ma3c
此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。512Please respect copyright.PENANAxWg2y8OsG1
或許,再見不遠。 512Please respect copyright.PENANAMK7uT4fCcn
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
512Please respect copyright.PENANAYrx6WKTg3X
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
512Please respect copyright.PENANARHhkBkZ72h
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。512Please respect copyright.PENANAl8Z51WrVIs
就像青春微酸甜那般。512Please respect copyright.PENANAnW8hKXnGw7
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。512Please respect copyright.PENANAAjRyORCoeN
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。512Please respect copyright.PENANAXIJm0toUoQ
512Please respect copyright.PENANA0PWJvXLKd8
「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANASMjp9N2VKx
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。512Please respect copyright.PENANAGA4TkvAZCM
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。512Please respect copyright.PENANA2mCaYPXKDU
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。512Please respect copyright.PENANAGrYZ98S2B3
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。512Please respect copyright.PENANAo2i5ovcnPe
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。512Please respect copyright.PENANAICGIcZjbAy
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。512Please respect copyright.PENANA9tqSnltiBt
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。512Please respect copyright.PENANAC2AxEmGXWV
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANA7huQ5xYjdu
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4TkTgfO424
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4PdlpyKCHy
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。512Please respect copyright.PENANA3DNzWG84sk
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
512Please respect copyright.PENANACZz5LFUX9M
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。512Please respect copyright.PENANAtyTJTdvm0B
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1pyWT9Um4q
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。512Please respect copyright.PENANAjeQu5dQXCW
512Please respect copyright.PENANAe2qfJLmJLC
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。512Please respect copyright.PENANAa8H2vgvJEM
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
512Please respect copyright.PENANAMZMyoYi75j
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。512Please respect copyright.PENANAOWmlsLnGw3
512Please respect copyright.PENANAiwSmeTZ7IZ
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。512Please respect copyright.PENANABpqLaSUKz7
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1kJskNqCV4
因那悸動。512Please respect copyright.PENANAUkr7w5ukUs
往往竟是那瞬間。
512Please respect copyright.PENANAbeH44AfeiZ
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。512Please respect copyright.PENANAvqHUjjeudh
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。512Please respect copyright.PENANAGKzeiz3R8v
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。512Please respect copyright.PENANAEfnJiWVbBR
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?512Please respect copyright.PENANANHqCXDkGWF
512Please respect copyright.PENANAxRHLNdywyS
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。512Please respect copyright.PENANAQA84AS2nCq
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。512Please respect copyright.PENANAkWuMxMr4Un
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
512Please respect copyright.PENANAnIyhsngBZp
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAhZsjnNW66q
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAvzYXOXulr8
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAx9wLKLvrGN
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAwUAgfaoZ4J
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANA8dhoQqHqrP
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAu0TQIHuoIX
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4z2gUUvlbH
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAonD1Jy3bUJ
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAw5Hl1Cmwsk
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
512Please respect copyright.PENANAuoGhNTsFQp
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
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【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
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新詩類
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【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧512Please respect copyright.PENANAXUo2fovzHn
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍512Please respect copyright.PENANAtlxBi7Neav
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我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單512Please respect copyright.PENANA60y63RMpUJ
而是是人在食用時能入口即化512Please respect copyright.PENANAxrvwr18WIX
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512Please respect copyright.PENANAqAcHfsdIGB
「嘗試把心臟調慢」512Please respect copyright.PENANAYICzqlnQaR
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久512Please respect copyright.PENANApO2SCHH46l
使人不會因為時間的洪流512Please respect copyright.PENANAIS0rO2PHJS
失去了炙熱512Please respect copyright.PENANAb9Y3nuJiNT
512Please respect copyright.PENANATI0lybejz8
512Please respect copyright.PENANAUvsHtf1rBq
詩名為《夏,冬眠》512Please respect copyright.PENANAMiE3GGjlQW
但夏季怎麼會有雪512Please respect copyright.PENANAI897StzAyV
令人加以反思512Please respect copyright.PENANAN4i2C7lEX4
雪季不該有的畫面512Please respect copyright.PENANA1xukKeJhPz
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏512Please respect copyright.PENANApkK72g2cQL
512Please respect copyright.PENANA7ZzjHUxvNL
或許512Please respect copyright.PENANAhfFUU3U2ka
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣512Please respect copyright.PENANAGSYZifEp3R
即便是來年512Please respect copyright.PENANAaoQS3s4Cnq
之後的每一年都依然如此
512Please respect copyright.PENANAiZu8cOR1zR
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。512Please respect copyright.PENANALRwHyngktD
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。512Please respect copyright.PENANAO2JbSuclMv
512Please respect copyright.PENANABdpi6xthrv
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。512Please respect copyright.PENANAK0Zy3Thf67
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。512Please respect copyright.PENANAEQPPWYJUzA
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。512Please respect copyright.PENANAdZoylTKQ9D
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。512Please respect copyright.PENANAXLZhjqyoRd
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4ZZbQ85tPN
景物依然,妳卻不然。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqk859GGm8F
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。512Please respect copyright.PENANANcaDh7GDOH
更多的是此刻的情殤。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqzaYlUbadW
512Please respect copyright.PENANAePAecwwaOZ
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。512Please respect copyright.PENANAMhgy8J4Eys
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAN0KXVlr96A
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAp1tM160x70
512Please respect copyright.PENANAlMDyojwji5
512Please respect copyright.PENANAtR8C4hocvB
夏季,這絢麗。512Please respect copyright.PENANAKqrdxz0zOJ
如曇花一現的煙花。512Please respect copyright.PENANAkS4DR9Mw7g
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
512Please respect copyright.PENANA6s1cA4ec61
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqjJmhabenD
同如起、轉、合三處意境。512Please respect copyright.PENANAJHHkeXwTa9
512Please respect copyright.PENANAXgMKCwnTS1
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。512Please respect copyright.PENANAC4A9ajTY7E
512Please respect copyright.PENANAksbzvyAg0A
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。512Please respect copyright.PENANApXlYjd91NP
512Please respect copyright.PENANAo6cobnfHZV
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
512Please respect copyright.PENANAWLLWInfQvL
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴512Please respect copyright.PENANAqnbs5XYHHq
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開512Please respect copyright.PENANAL9t8RhU3hH
512Please respect copyright.PENANAhUaKc0tTlF
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿512Please respect copyright.PENANAKypglUWVHm
句中江畔相隨512Please respect copyright.PENANA9O1iJ4bOTw
卻又未知天意是何在512Please respect copyright.PENANAIUiquyPJ2H
512Please respect copyright.PENANANmQl9jmx8g
即便是狂嘯 悲歌512Please respect copyright.PENANApnbyYmKmQu
天上繁星 銀河512Please respect copyright.PENANAWC3cg7FyMO
也僅是萬千世界的一粟512Please respect copyright.PENANA19lhZJclZh
卻找不出能取掉你的其一512Please respect copyright.PENANA69VWpS7jsO
512Please respect copyright.PENANAASM8dafFe9
從回到閣樓512Please respect copyright.PENANAD9gg6oTRQP
又再次漫步獨醉512Please respect copyright.PENANAKhmLHf3rq3
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉512Please respect copyright.PENANANKlbeHHZ43
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉512Please respect copyright.PENANAphJwQoopXt
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了512Please respect copyright.PENANAPoiyOtYaWe
512Please respect copyright.PENANAnlrLM70dgA
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路512Please respect copyright.PENANAwkL1dr7TCH
也不過只是再次三世512Please respect copyright.PENANAKNBJCZmjeX
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
512Please respect copyright.PENANARU64f2fYR9
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。512Please respect copyright.PENANAoNJtN55mvk
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。512Please respect copyright.PENANAgU0OWvrDo2
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。512Please respect copyright.PENANAUub1TdwGWH
(感謝科普。)512Please respect copyright.PENANA1AGwfi2TP0
512Please respect copyright.PENANAXPOSa7tTDc
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。512Please respect copyright.PENANAyS3eWJWEsL
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。512Please respect copyright.PENANAQoo7IQMTBz
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4aqNjumh46
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。512Please respect copyright.PENANAvbKT4FTehK
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。512Please respect copyright.PENANAdXF6rHTVOi
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。512Please respect copyright.PENANAnqM7ERqlV3
512Please respect copyright.PENANAExA1dY9Z3u
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。512Please respect copyright.PENANABKyD0CkVbU
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。512Please respect copyright.PENANAMWhHV9s3q8
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。512Please respect copyright.PENANALdBH9OGLTI
512Please respect copyright.PENANAteVM6hq9Fk
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
512Please respect copyright.PENANAEDxHfxMD53
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
512Please respect copyright.PENANALw2y4U4jt0
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1cMjOxuInP
512Please respect copyright.PENANAM9mJm99UIa
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。512Please respect copyright.PENANAknVtFefbCF
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
512Please respect copyright.PENANAjkPquh5je1
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?512Please respect copyright.PENANApy3C4Tii8d
512Please respect copyright.PENANAd4tSuYv3Jx
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。512Please respect copyright.PENANAgTKRV3n2zE
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。512Please respect copyright.PENANA6z3NomaR9n
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。512Please respect copyright.PENANAQQ1BF7MAIp
512Please respect copyright.PENANA4J69SbobiN
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」512Please respect copyright.PENANAWuHNtiW6Rr
512Please respect copyright.PENANAIZGHGQV935
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。512Please respect copyright.PENANAUIigokWpnw
512Please respect copyright.PENANAamMFAvsHOf
前世,已放下。512Please respect copyright.PENANAo8kpq7Hgsx
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1qu853TVQI
512Please respect copyright.PENANAEBOszzzOJ9
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
512Please respect copyright.PENANA3CIih7QGaR
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。512Please respect copyright.PENANA1NfTTu6ZL8
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:512Please respect copyright.PENANATqKMILedaC
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」512Please respect copyright.PENANAfOrRVnFQwI
512Please respect copyright.PENANAchmAf1QdLJ
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。512Please respect copyright.PENANArCtrhJS17s
越是得來不易。512Please respect copyright.PENANAmB4VVYqyhA
512Please respect copyright.PENANAdrH6T2bQbQ
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。512Please respect copyright.PENANAgeLBUeQld8
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。512Please respect copyright.PENANA7GhJL0kCTk
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
512Please respect copyright.PENANAIKaomCvLy6
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。512Please respect copyright.PENANAnWPJqnZaL3
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。512Please respect copyright.PENANANphzvlngtT
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。512Please respect copyright.PENANAk7DyRktB6s
如我們未盡的緣分這般。512Please respect copyright.PENANAkJSrbwsMhX
512Please respect copyright.PENANAsh3oqwSqqy
512Please respect copyright.PENANAPl9dJvrsWi
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。512Please respect copyright.PENANAKOdixGRxSP
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。512Please respect copyright.PENANAfRJcMzKGSp
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。512Please respect copyright.PENANADLvyL45lLy
512Please respect copyright.PENANALNwHF9giiF
512Please respect copyright.PENANAdxwO7LeeLM
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。512Please respect copyright.PENANAPv0tO9RXKH
我並不知情。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqBkUXbUh2f
也不再無從得知。512Please respect copyright.PENANAQr109I414d
512Please respect copyright.PENANAXcszLAGcX1
512Please respect copyright.PENANADRbUU3rlYJ
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。512Please respect copyright.PENANA4ImTHh6M7y
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」512Please respect copyright.PENANA2nmKnlMBe8
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。512Please respect copyright.PENANAAzPu0Kko2J
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。512Please respect copyright.PENANAtFQCUPWZzi
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視512Please respect copyright.PENANABRmqk4N2xt
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛512Please respect copyright.PENANALe6LQhJB8o
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待512Please respect copyright.PENANA5nbBwmHE5U
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而在萬里無雲的日常512Please respect copyright.PENANA1zDmVYQrpa
大地照耀出了你的光芒512Please respect copyright.PENANAgKgmWy8vn8
只想著短暫沒有你的存在512Please respect copyright.PENANACj7URUxi19
與緬懷影子的並行512Please respect copyright.PENANAmaP0SozU0H
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而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手512Please respect copyright.PENANAFUgc6GQgIN
敲響了人群一日的序幕512Please respect copyright.PENANAadUdVvC6sz
島與海512Please respect copyright.PENANAuJZIk96VP0
又為何區分你、我呢512Please respect copyright.PENANAymaZ4iV1TL
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你512Please respect copyright.PENANAFPirPXhzuX
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隨著四季的變化512Please respect copyright.PENANA5ARzZ0CT3h
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時512Please respect copyright.PENANA4giZG7VB5N
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩512Please respect copyright.PENANALK6DBDct8Q
詩意要較為薄弱512Please respect copyright.PENANAezcH5qply0
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分512Please respect copyright.PENANAk0ErrTxf91
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感512Please respect copyright.PENANAE2rPoa6Naq
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。512Please respect copyright.PENANAcnh7ZhWJQ0
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。512Please respect copyright.PENANATIB4fBkipE
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。512Please respect copyright.PENANAV3WKS1GLOQ
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。512Please respect copyright.PENANAqs92ovKgvm
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。512Please respect copyright.PENANA4teRw4zCZG
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。512Please respect copyright.PENANAKc9XInXAxF
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。512Please respect copyright.PENANATlOhw62Mxd
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。512Please respect copyright.PENANA4k8mibF7ok
每個人的角度皆為不同。512Please respect copyright.PENANAxK8kaKinPw
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有人感受深刻,512Please respect copyright.PENANAIgyvPbMszP
有人無感,512Please respect copyright.PENANA5BeEUY75lC
各有差異。512Please respect copyright.PENANAZS3njE5IBq
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,512Please respect copyright.PENANAd921DuFDe7
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。512Please respect copyright.PENANAQdyZhyZjNV
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。512Please respect copyright.PENANAAyAJ52PM8W
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。512Please respect copyright.PENANAHIuv7XpdOf
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。512Please respect copyright.PENANAob0f8olz9d
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。512Please respect copyright.PENANAWm17dMYOgI
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。512Please respect copyright.PENANAZmGZKIogcg
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。512Please respect copyright.PENANACNfs7lHvwl
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。512Please respect copyright.PENANAovkcSXbi1c
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。512Please respect copyright.PENANACzowvNCqyn
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。512Please respect copyright.PENANAA9lvIKN1Ov
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。512Please respect copyright.PENANA6ZZbxMGjxo
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。512Please respect copyright.PENANAUYaz5UUQR1
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七夕。512Please respect copyright.PENANAyq8q5PFyad
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。512Please respect copyright.PENANAEABB1nfx3d
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。512Please respect copyright.PENANAsONYfW8qjk
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩512Please respect copyright.PENANApXar8nuOQS
用道地口吻方式呈現512Please respect copyright.PENANA9oMDMgS1zZ
別有一番令人感同身受的味道512Please respect copyright.PENANAbbHxmLj7VW
512Please respect copyright.PENANA1evZ2T3AIw
華麗的新詩固然有深沈512Please respect copyright.PENANApVN5u98FI9
反覆咀嚼的口感512Please respect copyright.PENANACga9WfTUQe
但相較於打油詩512Please respect copyright.PENANAT7TK9VlJMY
卻更能反映生活上的記趣512Please respect copyright.PENANAgtavpqVypr
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!512Please respect copyright.PENANAz46XxcANpB
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夏季沉悶、炙熱512Please respect copyright.PENANAFwxcgzKKPU
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情512Please respect copyright.PENANAPfeyXUeNOH
保持理性與忍耐512Please respect copyright.PENANASiheNbJcFg
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來512Please respect copyright.PENANA0udIVOoABJ
深深吸一口氣512Please respect copyright.PENANAKEOTOT5igA
靜下來看一下周遭的事物512Please respect copyright.PENANArbGMbm2muq
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。512Please respect copyright.PENANADcwA18d4yT
一種相思,兩處閒愁。512Please respect copyright.PENANA9OoZjqgSTy
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。512Please respect copyright.PENANAq6QN3S94WL
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?512Please respect copyright.PENANAcxwuI5Wrxq
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。512Please respect copyright.PENANAwg396PzCrV
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。512Please respect copyright.PENANAp0AOUALLYm
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 512Please respect copyright.PENANAr20JPquiW7
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。512Please respect copyright.PENANA7vviMDUxIg
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。512Please respect copyright.PENANAeF6X7mR28w
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。512Please respect copyright.PENANAuZXNuB9GOk
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我們仍未可知。512Please respect copyright.PENANA8d76Gu870C
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~512Please respect copyright.PENANAt9OgCy8t0O