首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。571Please respect copyright.PENANAAT7G0rDNL9
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---571Please respect copyright.PENANAoeK00besoT
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。571Please respect copyright.PENANA65tPGc4Ywd
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。571Please respect copyright.PENANAdmHEEYlKIo
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。571Please respect copyright.PENANAo7m1HWeFuo
而這篇在下章就是如此。571Please respect copyright.PENANAfyzv7J02K5
571Please respect copyright.PENANAT03r8ArQ6B
林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。571Please respect copyright.PENANARkzNjK2Fhh
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。571Please respect copyright.PENANAYiHevjF3V8
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。571Please respect copyright.PENANATyqbFs6M1v
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。571Please respect copyright.PENANArdQ74nlBdR
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。571Please respect copyright.PENANAk9D5GRwfS9
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。571Please respect copyright.PENANAzuYZwBhDUg
571Please respect copyright.PENANAuGV4NkImW4
在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。571Please respect copyright.PENANATBr4JyoDgI
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。571Please respect copyright.PENANAz9CRXkEY5v
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANA4KotXw2fk8
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。571Please respect copyright.PENANA63KSCefigM
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林571Please respect copyright.PENANAIypz0UvJFZ
這故是關鍵的人物571Please respect copyright.PENANAow0ceIYbcF
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活571Please respect copyright.PENANApUXi3IksCm
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言571Please respect copyright.PENANAo51PO4ChGM
571Please respect copyright.PENANANRp62ly7vY
「我們的孩子」571Please respect copyright.PENANAeNBwjtF6Yy
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整571Please respect copyright.PENANABL62XPZmM4
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。571Please respect copyright.PENANAhXgNdecvgN
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後571Please respect copyright.PENANAVKnAnHl2bQ
也肯定還會有新的故事起點571Please respect copyright.PENANAdEPTgvCKSm
然而天下無不散的宴席571Please respect copyright.PENANAECJP2WtFGL
我們本次故事便到此結束571Please respect copyright.PENANAfwK4tezADr
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。571Please respect copyright.PENANA7TVPps0mpH
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。571Please respect copyright.PENANACJ0wkJmVOz
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。571Please respect copyright.PENANA5yWqWDy3S4
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。571Please respect copyright.PENANAYVs4Fwnj9J
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。571Please respect copyright.PENANAPYATdfnm9y
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。571Please respect copyright.PENANA8F05ltUf9j
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。571Please respect copyright.PENANAnfDXRc95mm
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。571Please respect copyright.PENANApw4D0vf1aX
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。571Please respect copyright.PENANAH9i78s7yFN
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANA9HRr4k6t6J
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANAr7sD4Jv7Cj
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。571Please respect copyright.PENANAv51gFgL59q
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。571Please respect copyright.PENANAO1fDWDmPNg
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。571Please respect copyright.PENANAFmWs3IrDR8
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。571Please respect copyright.PENANALqBXrEbuSC
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANA1SLRd0yzm8
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。571Please respect copyright.PENANAeOSVpXMiHr
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?571Please respect copyright.PENANAY05kNO0BYj
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」571Please respect copyright.PENANA1l033L3Bff
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAiINCcBHQyX
【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)571Please respect copyright.PENANAKvg9FU4C5S
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。571Please respect copyright.PENANAvMZQkc8Ikp
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。571Please respect copyright.PENANAmly1s1e43i
而故事線轉回到了從前。571Please respect copyright.PENANAOnTcjfjWJ7
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。571Please respect copyright.PENANAIQWbk84JDD
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。571Please respect copyright.PENANAeLax6TsJo5
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?571Please respect copyright.PENANAxTNH05FRuV
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?571Please respect copyright.PENANAGhouaWPW0h
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。571Please respect copyright.PENANAFeER21DiKy
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。571Please respect copyright.PENANAJNdCdNdXe4
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。571Please respect copyright.PENANAi1kwlFDIar
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。571Please respect copyright.PENANAu2mvzoWu0q
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。571Please respect copyright.PENANAyMN3vjXghX
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。571Please respect copyright.PENANAbpQ6xGBxFN
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。571Please respect copyright.PENANAeq0u0Fczix
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?571Please respect copyright.PENANAUuC4SFvQfM
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAnLnXFXWpv6
告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。571Please respect copyright.PENANAeTZreSjsrv
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。571Please respect copyright.PENANAGjotKs9RZZ
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAnvsAf6yQqu
這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。571Please respect copyright.PENANA0eX9a70irx
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。571Please respect copyright.PENANAxbS2JdlljM
至此,幾年前分別以後。571Please respect copyright.PENANAkZIHJ9KGK3
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。571Please respect copyright.PENANAfc70YzYtJZ
571Please respect copyright.PENANAu0NxxASHO1
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。571Please respect copyright.PENANAxZUIsw7gAv
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。571Please respect copyright.PENANAIBHjcLzLZc
也是是疾病纏身。571Please respect copyright.PENANA0Nj36N1goy
也迫不得已,離開了他。571Please respect copyright.PENANAlCvkgnVMKv
571Please respect copyright.PENANAp5KkpZCC3O
贈我,是一個約定。571Please respect copyright.PENANAGXpJduE1jX
一個約定券的約定。 571Please respect copyright.PENANAFgcgreHNTW
而再見之時,人事已非。571Please respect copyright.PENANAEzJTWCuvZ1
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?571Please respect copyright.PENANAqP4XHhgPpG
571Please respect copyright.PENANAJ9sL5KQfhY
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。571Please respect copyright.PENANAGhCR3XhUCN
或許,再見不遠。 571Please respect copyright.PENANA9THyC3E9T9
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
571Please respect copyright.PENANA5BbecvzLJp
【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAqeVV3MefTQ
女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。571Please respect copyright.PENANAWbVd131FaQ
就像青春微酸甜那般。571Please respect copyright.PENANAnX5ROVjRyC
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。571Please respect copyright.PENANA8m2TKzJk4L
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。571Please respect copyright.PENANAhDEKO82y70
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANAK5FLr6URzw
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。571Please respect copyright.PENANAy6NmWNpe9h
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。571Please respect copyright.PENANA9rmWOQiE2K
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。571Please respect copyright.PENANAlOUgV3WgSy
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。571Please respect copyright.PENANAehHDzAS5Nu
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。571Please respect copyright.PENANAHSGUisd9kG
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。571Please respect copyright.PENANAcPOyXwcAXl
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。571Please respect copyright.PENANAn1p0EAbUJx
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANAZz50YyVTpZ
571Please respect copyright.PENANAHgvvG2Arzf
夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAfRcqbIZ3f5
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。571Please respect copyright.PENANAPWyb4BNcSO
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAQE1rL3Y9cN
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。571Please respect copyright.PENANAF7waWVYwtt
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。571Please respect copyright.PENANAnHlEgBxQk6
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。571Please respect copyright.PENANAX82e3zlftI
571Please respect copyright.PENANAvvPR7pXsnh
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。571Please respect copyright.PENANAXHWn3uVuff
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
571Please respect copyright.PENANATR8Br6wTzC
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。571Please respect copyright.PENANAzKwxqaBGjh
571Please respect copyright.PENANAWlUdWnHVBW
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。571Please respect copyright.PENANAw4d9NJBYGK
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。571Please respect copyright.PENANAY8ISusN62S
因那悸動。571Please respect copyright.PENANApUdIqN7JAK
往往竟是那瞬間。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAmdkWktGFa2
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。571Please respect copyright.PENANAWP0W9UEdDe
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。571Please respect copyright.PENANARlgvJgjWzp
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。571Please respect copyright.PENANAwvMoHgrChF
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?571Please respect copyright.PENANAYgrizcL5yR
571Please respect copyright.PENANA3vn21fRHF4
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。571Please respect copyright.PENANAmohMcfP0qr
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。571Please respect copyright.PENANARoXT2Q2wkQ
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
571Please respect copyright.PENANAgy30jUFWYD
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAV1qibjM46P
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAefrgeeb2hs
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANA7P9xoUESpf
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAnHeQSKIxh4
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANA7JbH09RJzR
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANABRuqy0AjQh
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAopraKYyzCG
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAkmmT0OmxUT
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANAuvHt1zGIY6
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
571Please respect copyright.PENANANTasH7LRSI
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
571Please respect copyright.PENANAjRurKxCvfe
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
571Please respect copyright.PENANAZIqdDWzCt4
新詩類
571Please respect copyright.PENANAOzFJIgHkmm
【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧571Please respect copyright.PENANAw41Fvtun9L
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍571Please respect copyright.PENANAYYvv4fNyDV
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)571Please respect copyright.PENANAijJMrEfBSd
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單571Please respect copyright.PENANAnfDNtwJ2GC
而是是人在食用時能入口即化571Please respect copyright.PENANAM0j3EKzzC7
571Please respect copyright.PENANA3aQXicWcGj
571Please respect copyright.PENANAdzzwVh2f4L
「嘗試把心臟調慢」571Please respect copyright.PENANANSv81XgSzE
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久571Please respect copyright.PENANA5lQ05SyLTX
使人不會因為時間的洪流571Please respect copyright.PENANAErngUPpMlP
失去了炙熱571Please respect copyright.PENANAdr6HErIuUE
571Please respect copyright.PENANAZ5nYsiIqie
571Please respect copyright.PENANAaLkkqbKvL9
詩名為《夏,冬眠》571Please respect copyright.PENANAQKxxNvk9xl
但夏季怎麼會有雪571Please respect copyright.PENANA5U1YdgvWmL
令人加以反思571Please respect copyright.PENANAdm9Nj7wjWD
雪季不該有的畫面571Please respect copyright.PENANAJQRNlft2yw
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏571Please respect copyright.PENANAumFFHBA8gB
571Please respect copyright.PENANAL6N0vsJ8sb
或許571Please respect copyright.PENANAMVQagA4Jq1
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣571Please respect copyright.PENANAZqg7Poee3h
即便是來年571Please respect copyright.PENANARvXg7w82z3
之後的每一年都依然如此
571Please respect copyright.PENANAtqjMqSuT1Y
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。571Please respect copyright.PENANAIpYpudOqRR
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。571Please respect copyright.PENANAHA1uapKmH7
571Please respect copyright.PENANAx988mRvzZW
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。571Please respect copyright.PENANAR91XUUdD84
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。571Please respect copyright.PENANAlSGJ4SBGn4
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。571Please respect copyright.PENANA85XhL2G6vh
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。571Please respect copyright.PENANAHoVFro0Azc
571Please respect copyright.PENANAWXpIJE26Zb
景物依然,妳卻不然。571Please respect copyright.PENANAphrWaKfPS6
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。571Please respect copyright.PENANAkO9KfrittG
更多的是此刻的情殤。571Please respect copyright.PENANAH9bldIivLJ
571Please respect copyright.PENANAR7T2C7ktKg
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。571Please respect copyright.PENANAe6Wc9h84kh
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANATf1vcLkbox
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANAXLskQ1teyf
571Please respect copyright.PENANA5Eo1L9k6mg
571Please respect copyright.PENANAEJVTuesXZN
夏季,這絢麗。571Please respect copyright.PENANADnW8i8Ds3i
如曇花一現的煙花。571Please respect copyright.PENANAHY7MTWThum
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
571Please respect copyright.PENANA4WRRAWQnQD
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。571Please respect copyright.PENANA3XronnuxDv
同如起、轉、合三處意境。571Please respect copyright.PENANAwGcHHREZaO
571Please respect copyright.PENANAH0OFiizPwO
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。571Please respect copyright.PENANAm5o8H0uVFn
571Please respect copyright.PENANAYvYefX3ZEo
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。571Please respect copyright.PENANAYmICQJasWv
571Please respect copyright.PENANAUGxD0BWI3O
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
571Please respect copyright.PENANA5I6FAzmELW
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴571Please respect copyright.PENANAMNZb7uOxBS
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開571Please respect copyright.PENANA1R1JMQrRpX
571Please respect copyright.PENANAf1KlsnrfU1
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿571Please respect copyright.PENANAB3wDURCir5
句中江畔相隨571Please respect copyright.PENANA3KW5TH3oOT
卻又未知天意是何在571Please respect copyright.PENANAkMN8EnRM2L
571Please respect copyright.PENANAMrIqAq0EIr
即便是狂嘯 悲歌571Please respect copyright.PENANAp9blhRD1qy
天上繁星 銀河571Please respect copyright.PENANA5XNwPmf6Rx
也僅是萬千世界的一粟571Please respect copyright.PENANA6AJYLmyhYB
卻找不出能取掉你的其一571Please respect copyright.PENANAerlslPwxkD
571Please respect copyright.PENANAFZ3CM5lVNH
從回到閣樓571Please respect copyright.PENANA2pbEICV48C
又再次漫步獨醉571Please respect copyright.PENANAlhDimjxVYO
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉571Please respect copyright.PENANA5q0lm6m14E
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉571Please respect copyright.PENANAicaUgZTWZV
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了571Please respect copyright.PENANAWQqubUiVbU
571Please respect copyright.PENANAutdv1E2VLy
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路571Please respect copyright.PENANAWSw1csuoX0
也不過只是再次三世571Please respect copyright.PENANAga3JBWAejb
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
571Please respect copyright.PENANAcmvp7XbGTX
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。571Please respect copyright.PENANArFv8RSomPH
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。571Please respect copyright.PENANADkHLiY2j2o
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。571Please respect copyright.PENANAky70bR1Ny2
(感謝科普。)571Please respect copyright.PENANAoRHJ2IO01j
571Please respect copyright.PENANAKuV0AQckCA
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。571Please respect copyright.PENANAsAGBNUJid9
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。571Please respect copyright.PENANAfRnEG42C23
571Please respect copyright.PENANA6NBmjoSZAa
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。571Please respect copyright.PENANAfs1y2IA3ir
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。571Please respect copyright.PENANAh91QKJRy5b
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。571Please respect copyright.PENANAe236Inxkri
571Please respect copyright.PENANAn1Z7bHwpR8
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。571Please respect copyright.PENANAeTaMuTwG3B
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。571Please respect copyright.PENANAZTji5FIAQ5
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。571Please respect copyright.PENANAFe2lm6JOUv
571Please respect copyright.PENANA1MyQ8YnKzI
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
571Please respect copyright.PENANACenNYUrZMA
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
571Please respect copyright.PENANA2OL5aUO1t1
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。571Please respect copyright.PENANAfu3jF9GDZv
571Please respect copyright.PENANAJwLGydG0RL
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。571Please respect copyright.PENANAJn2sPa0tdI
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
571Please respect copyright.PENANA3qy6jC4dyk
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?571Please respect copyright.PENANA6zMrtOgCj6
571Please respect copyright.PENANA2KWJJTjnbZ
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。571Please respect copyright.PENANAzO7RYn94AA
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。571Please respect copyright.PENANAUXhOQW6JG7
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。571Please respect copyright.PENANALVHFiYHvVZ
571Please respect copyright.PENANAXvOGJnOUIs
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」571Please respect copyright.PENANATxHNhIju2G
571Please respect copyright.PENANAXtyb2xTQhQ
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。571Please respect copyright.PENANAsHttnIxvnt
571Please respect copyright.PENANAlYUFv87uD3
前世,已放下。571Please respect copyright.PENANAuqUpOegrGD
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。571Please respect copyright.PENANA9pQ3m7WqOa
571Please respect copyright.PENANAcZZkydf12O
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
571Please respect copyright.PENANA8e6bYE25hC
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。571Please respect copyright.PENANAMoxu2gHjDx
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:571Please respect copyright.PENANAU6GsQgI8nE
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」571Please respect copyright.PENANA6FpefeaB0L
571Please respect copyright.PENANArAPOxUkZnT
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。571Please respect copyright.PENANAvnw4FitVYQ
越是得來不易。571Please respect copyright.PENANAwaB8LLyIqy
571Please respect copyright.PENANAmwVXEVVSKM
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。571Please respect copyright.PENANAoCtPwfYEo3
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。571Please respect copyright.PENANAsoVdRK21XM
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
571Please respect copyright.PENANAlurtMQtvCM
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。571Please respect copyright.PENANAEwLj0QQllR
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。571Please respect copyright.PENANAPd87Wk8jG7
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。571Please respect copyright.PENANAqm6qTH2GJC
如我們未盡的緣分這般。571Please respect copyright.PENANAkDdS9sfJrM
571Please respect copyright.PENANAMq5WRYPHcY
571Please respect copyright.PENANAOhPeE1czrx
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。571Please respect copyright.PENANApkBvVoE6ST
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。571Please respect copyright.PENANAWWBkqyuhUo
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。571Please respect copyright.PENANALmY81C9Ogi
571Please respect copyright.PENANAbl7x9QTzKX
571Please respect copyright.PENANA5XsczxHVzz
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。571Please respect copyright.PENANAcj3kMXVnOF
我並不知情。571Please respect copyright.PENANAPR0khpVT1t
也不再無從得知。571Please respect copyright.PENANA5NGkDMsAH9
571Please respect copyright.PENANAUrr4XOpgWA
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「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。571Please respect copyright.PENANAPWpRhkL82J
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」571Please respect copyright.PENANAerm8zv12sR
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。571Please respect copyright.PENANAFzRm6CeJtS
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。571Please respect copyright.PENANACN0fkzpE64
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視571Please respect copyright.PENANAnflZd15eh9
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛571Please respect copyright.PENANAFG3bjp5JEq
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待571Please respect copyright.PENANAYFHwdItxlX
571Please respect copyright.PENANAtWeBbgdqPG
而在萬里無雲的日常571Please respect copyright.PENANA0QpxfJo4Fw
大地照耀出了你的光芒571Please respect copyright.PENANA1MbpAeBFe3
只想著短暫沒有你的存在571Please respect copyright.PENANAN1Cqh4uegM
與緬懷影子的並行571Please respect copyright.PENANAT4etD711Y6
571Please respect copyright.PENANASrLvO7DMeA
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手571Please respect copyright.PENANAqZ0pEJaXjk
敲響了人群一日的序幕571Please respect copyright.PENANAak94KSmOtA
島與海571Please respect copyright.PENANAsX7qHn1WiZ
又為何區分你、我呢571Please respect copyright.PENANAh6y5tQs2DW
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你571Please respect copyright.PENANArYUIhMuisf
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隨著四季的變化571Please respect copyright.PENANAKhmjE4rr1l
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時571Please respect copyright.PENANAtISm36AW0F
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩571Please respect copyright.PENANA6o2mGD8Vtm
詩意要較為薄弱571Please respect copyright.PENANAZ24jJ5atFg
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分571Please respect copyright.PENANAM6jytV46uP
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感571Please respect copyright.PENANAWA1KsvdEVb
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。571Please respect copyright.PENANAV6ViWYEsAv
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。571Please respect copyright.PENANAVInvYDtfmR
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。571Please respect copyright.PENANAdX0ygD2til
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。571Please respect copyright.PENANAYYUsmQAuCd
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。571Please respect copyright.PENANAwz6oNcNdxi
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。571Please respect copyright.PENANAyWuxFO44uS
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。571Please respect copyright.PENANAdbzqtH78Lq
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。571Please respect copyright.PENANAZZtUexqWnJ
每個人的角度皆為不同。571Please respect copyright.PENANA3UzNfPe295
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有人感受深刻,571Please respect copyright.PENANAXQTQQtKr1x
有人無感,571Please respect copyright.PENANA3jzTMvGLGJ
各有差異。571Please respect copyright.PENANAZyVuS0oD0W
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,571Please respect copyright.PENANAePGRG3Iq9s
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。571Please respect copyright.PENANAMFe74AwpJD
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。571Please respect copyright.PENANA7FSjIsKtAF
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。571Please respect copyright.PENANAEmJ0q8UFjv
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。571Please respect copyright.PENANA0hMgAj6qqM
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。571Please respect copyright.PENANAty1FmTtkIG
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。571Please respect copyright.PENANA71iTNTFuLu
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。571Please respect copyright.PENANAci1yEPEPY7
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。571Please respect copyright.PENANA2U6FOizsMj
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。571Please respect copyright.PENANA4lnLCzrRhp
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。571Please respect copyright.PENANAQ1VePjxqnM
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。571Please respect copyright.PENANANqbZlSGhCB
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。571Please respect copyright.PENANAbxSXZGZkKi
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七夕。571Please respect copyright.PENANA0lx6SOXf1s
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。571Please respect copyright.PENANAK3ihHSj58G
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。571Please respect copyright.PENANAedN7TPSIKv
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩571Please respect copyright.PENANAzPnIYNYpTY
用道地口吻方式呈現571Please respect copyright.PENANAqgyv5iKXwA
別有一番令人感同身受的味道571Please respect copyright.PENANA4K2TBFlWul
571Please respect copyright.PENANAFelkMvY4rJ
華麗的新詩固然有深沈571Please respect copyright.PENANAvP9O6g9zYj
反覆咀嚼的口感571Please respect copyright.PENANAIC6VEw9C9j
但相較於打油詩571Please respect copyright.PENANAk14n9XcUH9
卻更能反映生活上的記趣571Please respect copyright.PENANAZ8FNq4RmIY
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!571Please respect copyright.PENANASAZKQWSHGz
571Please respect copyright.PENANAl4sQx7ammq
夏季沉悶、炙熱571Please respect copyright.PENANA1Mj7MsypmY
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情571Please respect copyright.PENANAgIwjhfFMF0
保持理性與忍耐571Please respect copyright.PENANAfakHGojP1Z
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來571Please respect copyright.PENANAelHI6eozhe
深深吸一口氣571Please respect copyright.PENANA1yARniGsEa
靜下來看一下周遭的事物571Please respect copyright.PENANAKrpinxNErO
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。571Please respect copyright.PENANA656KZW364o
一種相思,兩處閒愁。571Please respect copyright.PENANATruPQPFtx3
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。571Please respect copyright.PENANAVd9Eg3pMy4
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?571Please respect copyright.PENANAygNfiwNt9V
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。571Please respect copyright.PENANArjWe0IZB0g
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。571Please respect copyright.PENANApPpQ4n6YnF
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 571Please respect copyright.PENANAjEcWcDStRa
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。571Please respect copyright.PENANAzJmMEL9Say
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。571Please respect copyright.PENANAStSWG2OZG3
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。571Please respect copyright.PENANA0fhPeWSu8k
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我們仍未可知。571Please respect copyright.PENANAqK5yKoh3D5
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~571Please respect copyright.PENANABvtUPFpG0B