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#15
The Power
sitalakshmi
Nov 14, 2017
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​What in the world? The voice in my head muttered several times as some women calmed Daisy and took her away to a room. Uncle Elias stood at the center, grief burning in his dry eyes. Many people standing in the living room kept staring at him. An explanation…That’s what they wanted. But they didn’t dare ask…16Please respect copyright.PENANAnixvL5LQ4f
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“I think it’s time we went.” Someone whispered beside me. Jenny…She was calm, almost startlingly so, despite the insanity that was going around us.16Please respect copyright.PENANAi11zhP7d2e
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“Wait…”16Please respect copyright.PENANAVpVIE8298f
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“Amy...I have something to tell you.”16Please respect copyright.PENANAopLVAGfQnp
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And she pulled me away. Even as we walked out of the gate, I heard Aunt Daisy’s screams. She was cursing Uncle Elias…She wanted nothing more than to see him hanged.16Please respect copyright.PENANAj5QAzS9R1W
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“Would he do something like that?” I muttered. “I mean…”16Please respect copyright.PENANA0YlP6nkmrX
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“It’s understandable that she is a bit…”16Please respect copyright.PENANArHUMFfIkQu
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Again, her calmness frightened me. Her voice was cold and matter-of-fact. As though she knew something that I didn’t.16Please respect copyright.PENANAYHh2iDEM88
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Did Jenny sense my thoughts? I think she did. Her eyes narrowed dangerously as she looked at me and said. “What's wrong?”16Please respect copyright.PENANAze82WPB2Qx
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"I think I should be the one asking you that question." I said. "What's wrong, Jenny?"copyright protection12PENANALvnZbAASxB

"There's..." She began. "No...It's nothing. I..."copyright protection12PENANAQtttTIME8h

"Blackmail..." The voice whispered.copyright protection12PENANA2In5G94ykD

At that point, I completely lost it. I was tired of hearing vague phrases and words, not knowing who was thinking what...It was infuriating - like having only five pieces of a jigsaw and trying to figure out what the whole picture was. copyright protection12PENANAO58b5kMFck

"Jenny..." I cried. " What about blackmail? Who's blackmailing who and how the hell do you know about it. Just tell me."copyright protection12PENANAh3NLwHtjmC

Jenny took a step back and stared at me, her face white. "How..."copyright protection12PENANABokYu17yzs

"It doesn't matter how I know. I'm...I've just about had enough. Just tell me."copyright protection12PENANAcoxkzDEmjR

People were staring but I didn't care. I kept yelling at her to tell me, while she just kept staring at me. Someone pulled me away from Jenny back into the house and into into an empty room. copyright protection12PENANAHAVvlscPMy

"Calm down." A gentle voice ordered.copyright protection12PENANArnXMlrOs0n

She was an old woman, surely above seventy years of age. Her kind face was full of wrinkles. Her brilliant blue eyes were full of a quiet sense of power.copyright protection12PENANAVcMtxm6cIp

"I'm sorry..." I muttered, awkwardly.copyright protection12PENANA3p0ZUms7ce

"I have never seen the power in so young a person before." copyright protection12PENANAFEBCrW4fp4

 It was as if I was struck by a lighting bolt. I stared at her, trying to at least ask one question but my voice got stuck somewhere in my throat.copyright protection12PENANADkgpNOLU0u

"Listen..." she said quietly. "I am going to give you one piece of advice and I want you follow it."copyright protection12PENANAk3Tl3OHvVU

"Why can I...How..."copyright protection12PENANAJByldZiifI

"Girl..." She said gently. "There are some people who are very good at reading others. They can see through lies and deception. they can sense when others are feeling down. They are very good listeners and have a wonderful memory for even the most trivial things they hear.One day they find that they have access to something they shouldn't have. The thoughts and memories of other people."copyright protection12PENANAmS3DhRr3Lr

"Why?"copyright protection12PENANAx6vrrzf94b

"Even I don't know. But I do know this...It's not a boon...It's a curse..."copyright protection12PENANA3ONC90CrjR

"A curse?" I remembered the darkness...The irrational outburst I had just now...copyright protection12PENANAaFJdj14K4P

"The power grows stronger every day. It wouldn't be long before you understand what that means. Most go insane, unable to make sense of it."copyright protection12PENANAcCWI3nhjwm

"I..."copyright protection12PENANAuzahbkiOLB

"Here's my advice. Keep to yourself for a few days and ignore the voice. It will fade away on it's own."copyright protection12PENANAFWhp9Ardlv

"I..."copyright protection12PENANA3y7ZhbmyuT

"Listen to me, girl. Using this power will take a lot out of you. Remember what I said about going insane? That's the best outcome."copyright protection12PENANAUYt5gFpztb

"What's the worst?" All the information was overwhelming. I wasn't scared but that was probably because my brain was still processing the things I just heard.copyright protection12PENANAb87txg4Ztq

"You'll pass out and never wake up."copyright protection12PENANAuxYCxfNTOi

To be continued...copyright protection12PENANANIggNxVc7p

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Comments ( 2 )

Saberwolf - Some continuity issues I Spotted.

Firstly you clearly mentioned that they went outside to a silent place to have a chat, Then who were the people who stood by watching them.

Secondly Jenny was about to tell Amy something, Why did she pause in between?


Also a little lack of realism, If my friend somehow knew that I was being blackmailed or what not, I would freak out and WOULD NOT let her walk away with an old weirdo. Besides the advice the old woman gives... Is kinda disappointing. I dunno if its just me, but the description was vague, and kinda, felt like you cheated us? I don't know if it makes sense... Uh perhaps it was "Incomplete???"
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sitalakshmi - First of all thank you for taking the time to leave feedback. You obviously are taking a great interest in my story and I appreciate it.

The scene with the old woman is not done. Neither is her explanation and advice a complete one. It will be elaborated upon.

People just came around because Amy, frustrated and freaked out, was causing a scene. As with Jenny, she was shocked but there is a reason why she immediately did not go after Amy. Jenny paused because she was indescive about telling Amy what she knew. Again...Will be elaborated.

Thank you  again. Your comments are appreciated.
1 week agoreply

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