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#15
The Power
sitalakshmi
Nov 14, 2017
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​What in the world? The voice in my head muttered several times as some women calmed Daisy and took her away to a room. Uncle Elias stood at the center, grief burning in his dry eyes. Many people standing in the living room kept staring at him. An explanation…That’s what they wanted. But they didn’t dare ask…96Please respect copyright.PENANAu1Fprzwu0t
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“I think it’s time we went.” Someone whispered beside me. Jenny…She was calm, almost startlingly so, despite the insanity that was going around us.96Please respect copyright.PENANAwvXZG7sFtp
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“Wait…”96Please respect copyright.PENANAoZaQ0bWgSB
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“Amy...I have something to tell you.”96Please respect copyright.PENANAffHFI5xK0U
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And she pulled me away. Even as we walked out of the gate, I heard Aunt Daisy’s screams. She was cursing Uncle Elias…She wanted nothing more than to see him hanged.96Please respect copyright.PENANAMlsTsQHIGa
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“Would he do something like that?” I muttered. “I mean…”96Please respect copyright.PENANA3HFXFTRP52
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“It’s understandable that she is a bit…”96Please respect copyright.PENANAE1N4bocry5
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Again, her calmness frightened me. Her voice was cold and matter-of-fact. As though she knew something that I didn’t.96Please respect copyright.PENANAtbfQw1HHvg
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Did Jenny sense my thoughts? I think she did. Her eyes narrowed dangerously as she looked at me and said. “What's wrong?”96Please respect copyright.PENANAwCVjZtLgU4
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"I think I should be the one asking you that question." I said. "What's wrong, Jenny?"copyright protection92PENANA3QPTE3pXXl

"There's..." She began. "No...It's nothing. I..."copyright protection92PENANAfdVYXuounu

"Blackmail..." The voice whispered.copyright protection92PENANAgIrO7XFsr4

At that point, I completely lost it. I was tired of hearing vague phrases and words, not knowing who was thinking what...It was infuriating - like having only five pieces of a jigsaw and trying to figure out what the whole picture was. copyright protection92PENANAHvVxozAOxx

"Jenny..." I cried. " What about blackmail? Who's blackmailing who and how the hell do you know about it. Just tell me."copyright protection92PENANAaMK5LIAacX

Jenny took a step back and stared at me, her face white. "How..."copyright protection92PENANAEtG6hN3Wgv

"It doesn't matter how I know. I'm...I've just about had enough. Just tell me."copyright protection92PENANA1Y0Xvow5d3

People were staring but I didn't care. I kept yelling at her to tell me, while she just kept staring at me. Someone pulled me away from Jenny back into the house and into into an empty room. copyright protection92PENANADnQotC73Mk

"Calm down." A gentle voice ordered.copyright protection92PENANA1rNHy4vC1M

She was an old woman, surely above seventy years of age. Her kind face was full of wrinkles. Her brilliant blue eyes were full of a quiet sense of power.copyright protection92PENANA73K70gwxlJ

"I'm sorry..." I muttered, awkwardly.copyright protection92PENANABY7snA4uDR

"I have never seen the power in so young a person before." copyright protection92PENANAOFiBmRGStI

 It was as if I was struck by a lighting bolt. I stared at her, trying to at least ask one question but my voice got stuck somewhere in my throat.copyright protection92PENANAEAMpINFek0

"Listen..." she said quietly. "I am going to give you one piece of advice and I want you follow it."copyright protection92PENANAYWZ5omFtRj

"Why can I...How..."copyright protection92PENANAkFYDhluYdY

"Girl..." She said gently. "There are some people who are very good at reading others. They can see through lies and deception. they can sense when others are feeling down. They are very good listeners and have a wonderful memory for even the most trivial things they hear.One day they find that they have access to something they shouldn't have. The thoughts and memories of other people."copyright protection92PENANAGRysgggWvA

"Why?"copyright protection92PENANAWtxWyVjepa

"Even I don't know. But I do know this...It's not a boon...It's a curse..."copyright protection92PENANAxJQvn7QR53

"A curse?" I remembered the darkness...The irrational outburst I had just now...copyright protection92PENANAPMVofcFv8a

"The power grows stronger every day. It wouldn't be long before you understand what that means. Most go insane, unable to make sense of it."copyright protection92PENANA65ED1dzlrY

"I..."copyright protection92PENANAvYHmu5tlWz

"Here's my advice. Keep to yourself for a few days and ignore the voice. It will fade away on it's own."copyright protection92PENANApMmlbBxQ7G

"I..."copyright protection92PENANA1dLFRNSq8k

"Listen to me, girl. Using this power will take a lot out of you. Remember what I said about going insane? That's the best outcome."copyright protection92PENANAoEj60Nbu98

"What's the worst?" All the information was overwhelming. I wasn't scared but that was probably because my brain was still processing the things I just heard.copyright protection92PENANA4yVqT62rX9

"You'll pass out and never wake up."copyright protection92PENANA7YnSEeGxEO

To be continued...copyright protection92PENANAR3saatYlX7

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Comments ( 2 )

Saberwolf - Some continuity issues I Spotted.

Firstly you clearly mentioned that they went outside to a silent place to have a chat, Then who were the people who stood by watching them.

Secondly Jenny was about to tell Amy something, Why did she pause in between?


Also a little lack of realism, If my friend somehow knew that I was being blackmailed or what not, I would freak out and WOULD NOT let her walk away with an old weirdo. Besides the advice the old woman gives... Is kinda disappointing. I dunno if its just me, but the description was vague, and kinda, felt like you cheated us? I don't know if it makes sense... Uh perhaps it was "Incomplete???"
10 months agoreply

sitalakshmi - First of all thank you for taking the time to leave feedback. You obviously are taking a great interest in my story and I appreciate it.

The scene with the old woman is not done. Neither is her explanation and advice a complete one. It will be elaborated upon.

People just came around because Amy, frustrated and freaked out, was causing a scene. As with Jenny, she was shocked but there is a reason why she immediately did not go after Amy. Jenny paused because she was indescive about telling Amy what she knew. Again...Will be elaborated.

Thank you  again. Your comments are appreciated.
10 months agoreply

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