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Fantasy
Romance
Completed
The Mark of Hades
Writer Chloe Quinn
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Emoddess - Now that it's rewritten, I gotta say that it's better than the previous one :D
9 months agoreply

Chloe Quinn - It’s tying in with how I’ve decided this arc will go with Fay. For this book anyway. 
9 months agoreply

Emoddess - This seems like an interesting story! One thing though, it kinda sound to me like although Abe suddenly had a thought of offering something to her, it seemed like he was eager to save her (that's just the impression that I get from the dialogue) but the reason is not yet clear (like why does he want to do that out of the blue?)

What I mean is it sounded quite rushed on his part when he offered to save her and be his partner or suffer. Maybe it feels a bit odd when I read it (not really a big deal though so no worries I guess). That aside, I think the description of the story flows pretty well. Keep it up :)
9 months agoreply

Chloe Quinn - Yeah, I'd like to re-write this part. Stretch it out a fraction but thank you for the comments. I look forward to hearing further from you :)
9 months agoreply

Emoddess - @Chloe Quinn, :D
9 months agoreply

Chloe Quinn - @Emoddess, a new rough draft version up.
9 months agoreply

Emoddess - @Chloe Quinn, Alright! :)
9 months agoreply

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