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Four Walls
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Chapter 1
BluNova
Jan 1, 2019
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sasha delphine - Wow! After reading the first issue, the first thing I thought was, awesome! One thing, I wasn't sure the tone of the mom's voice after the "got homework" part, so maybe say whether it was stern, or soft, or caring, or worried. Because I know any of those can be a mom's reaction depending on their personality. Just to build the character more. 
And also, I got a little confused who Maya was, and Sophie's connection to Jason. Brother, more like boyfriend? 
Nevertheless, I was blown away. It sounds great like a novel at a bookstore. Keep going!

2 weeks agoreply

BluNova - Awh thank you! I'll take that little note and might tweak a few things :3 
2 weeks agoreply

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