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Fighting the Dark
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3 years agoreply

Aretice N. Treader - I don't have much to say about this chapter because it's so short, but that's not necessarily bad! I can tell it's setting up quite a bit of suspense for future chapters, so that's good. A couple things I'd keep in mind are that there were a few simple typos (e.g. misspelling cotton) and not setting off direct addresses with commas ("Are you okay, miss?"), but other than that, this chapter was fine.
3 years agoreply

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