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Fantasy
The Knowledge Seeker
Writer Imascribble
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Chapter 1 - The Meeting
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Lunassandra Hughes - It's great, there's only one place I noted a slight error in the flow. "I felt a betrayer" I'd add a 'like'. But other than that, I can't spot another error on the first read-through. I would find it interesting to get a handle on Graham's own past in this issue, if only to get a taste for his underlying motivations, to lure the reader into wanting to know more about his character. I enjoyed it.
1 year agoreply

Imascribble - Thank you for your feedback! Good on you for catching that error :)
1 year agoreply

Strider - There is so much potential with this plot, it's kind of blowing my mind. I wonder where this Graham's power will lead him.
1 year agoreply

Imascribble - Thank you! I hope I don't disappoint.
1 year agoreply

Coen Wonder - I think you write quite well with clear words and great punctuation:) 
1 year agoreply

Imascribble - Thank you so much! :)
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