終完修正完第一章。改動的地方如下:
角色改名730Please respect copyright.PENANA9yhuriZElj
除了玄牛之外,所有畜牲集團的戰士都重新命名,因為那些陳生、李生、等等的命名,亂來之餘,又不符合作品性格。所以有以下改動:
何大力->南昌一絕730Please respect copyright.PENANA5OffnwBGNN
劉元山->海柏730Please respect copyright.PENANAO9kzrSy5hF
陳生->曉尚730Please respect copyright.PENANACOkDSF8jug
李生->曉珀730Please respect copyright.PENANAk1jwM5NLWR
嚴生->迎豐730Please respect copyright.PENANAdUwZ5Zoaso
史生->富薈730Please respect copyright.PENANANCbhdT8R8S
林生->傲形730Please respect copyright.PENANAfgTnG48baS
黃生->利奧730Please respect copyright.PENANAfI8qdbZKMm
張生->曉岸
執文法730Please respect copyright.PENANAJkoWskPBPt
也許是小弟進步了,現在回看第一章,文法竟是那麼糟糕,是以也大幅修正。730Please respect copyright.PENANAJAux31ficR