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#19
Navigating the Big Muddy - 2
jamber86
Dec 18, 2015
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Musesation - A cliffhanger! I haven't read one in a while, since I am rarely up to date with stories. You have very nice details about each character--a really well-formed image of them. But I sometimes feel as though the long paragraph of excellent descriptions puts the story on hold, rather than help with...fluidity? That might just be me though. I'm really looking forward to seeing how this story and romance will turn out.
3 years agoreply

jamber86 - I was afraid of that.  That's me trying too hard to create an authentic tone for the time period.  Thanks for the critique. I'll probably slice and dice it on my second time through. 
3 years agoreply

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