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Black Lace
Writer Jacquie112823
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Chapter 16- Protectors
Jacquie112823
Aug 8, 2019
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Fellintosadness - Honestly i love your writing and the story. One thing thats making me roll my eyes is how close they’ve become in so little time with so little interaction . I would say this maybe for your future works, build plots and situation that the characters find themselves in. That develops the relationship. Just cause they are soulmates doesn’t mean everything should or will go smooth sailing. Also don’t make other characters accessories. This is something I’ve recently learnt as well. There should be more than just the main characters. The other characters in the book are not there for the convenience or sake of the main characters. They should have their lives and plots too. It will make t more realistic and varied to read. Great work. Keep it up. Hopefully i don’t come across as annoying. x
8 months agoreply

Jacquie112823 - Thank you for your comment. I truly appreciate your brutal honesty! I love to hear feedback of any kind. It makes it easier to see where my readers are coming from and helps me improve in my writing! Thank you! 
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