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Romance
Adventure
Fractured
Co-Writer Jennie Camacho*
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#1
Chapter 1: Loss
Jennie Camacho
Nov 16, 2016
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Comments ( 2 )
- It wasn't a bad chapter, and I like how you described the characters' appearance throughout the scene, but I felt like it lacked a hook. Other than that, I am curious to see if he'll find a new mate or fall in love again. 
4 years agoreply

Jennie Camacho - Thank you so much. Yeah, I can see where the hook is pretty nonexistent. I am currently working on rewriting this chapter.
4 years agoreply

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