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Hope’s Bright!
Co-Writer Cynderz*
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Brayden Valero
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Dlofc84 - I like the flow of action so far. The characters are well drawn and formed. I will go through it more thorough tomorrow, but I love what I have read so far.
2 months agoreply

Frances - Okay, I just sent you an edit of this chapter as well. You have a good flow of action. One thing I'd like to hear is more about the powers Pennie possesses. She talks about summoning creatures but it came out of the blue, I would have loved a little more info at the beginning maybe so that part made more sense. Also, I was just wondering why she didn't try to summon creatures to save herself the first time the men attacked her? Was it because the CSOG were so close? Those were my only questions, other than that, great second chapter!
2 years agoreply

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