I am entering this into a competition soon, I would love some feedback!

For context, this is a Young Adult short story and is a metaphor for the fall of the divine and sacredness in our culture and how we should humanize it with others.

Also, it's a love story, who doesn't love that :)

Jeremy, a doctor aboard a pirate ship, discovers the true nature of his captain: a powerful, but reckless man, driven by his own ambition and power. Despite Jeremy's warning, the captain leads his crew on a dangerous path, resulting in a fierce battle with other pirates that leaves them stranded on a deserted island. Wounded and close to death, Jeremy is barely able to survive the ordeal, but just as he thinks it's all over, a mysterious figure appears, providing a glimmer of hope in the midst of the storm.

This is a story inside the world of One Piece, created by Eiichiro Oda.

In a distant future humanity achieved such a level of technological advancement it was able to breach the borders of three-dimensional reality and move to the multiverses of multidimensions. But some of us were too afraid to move on. So, they stayed. In many ways achieving god like powers and also immortality. But with it came a burden.

What is your last wish before you die?

Humanity has unlocked the elixir of eternal life.

The brain can be cleaned and washed back into youthfulness. The body cannot. But by transporting the brain to a younger body, one that can host it, it can continue living.

The synthetically produced humans are not people. Of course they're not. If they were people then the originally occurring humans would be monsters for killing them and transferring originally occurring brains into their bodies. The originally occurring people are not monsters. Of course not. They just want to live.

And to save something you need to kill something. The synths are a necessary sacrifice.

-----Ika has heard what the originals think about the synths. But she also knows her own heart, and her own grief, and her own terror.

———This story is in the public domain and anyone can do whatever they want with it.

Some people are meant to live forever; others aren't.

What happens when a failed man of god becomes a god of science, curing his young godddaughter of an incurable illness? How did he have this power?

What happens when he leaves one girl with the ability to make someone else immortal?

What happens when the first immortals begin a magical vigilante collective, whose main purpose in existence is preventing humankind bound to mortality from forgetting?

What happens when the unknown benevolent god of the immortal kind grants special, magical gifts to two young immortals; yet punishes them with a curse for using their gifts for the greater good?

A curse is strong, but the blood of angels is stronger.

(Victorian era origin story and continuing story in modern era)

© Avi Clarice, All rights reserved.

🌸🌸Disclaimer: please be informed that I do not own the rights to the characters in this story except #74 and #75 which are part of our creation. Bai Fengjiu, Donghua and the majority of characters in the story are fictional characters created by Tang Qi. Lord Wenchang is a character mentioned in the Ten Miles of Peach Blossom drama.

OOC: Please also note that the depiction of Fengjiu and Donghua in this story may vary a lot from the original and what DongFeng is in your minds. Kindly proceed to read this story with caution.🌸🌸

For almost 300 years after Bai Fengjiu is crowned as queen of the Qingqiu Kingdom, she has never spoken a single word to the cold and emotionless Donghua Dijun. At the same time, she is destined with an unknown person, Wenchang Dijun. When a calamity happens one day and Donghua vanishes, will Fengjiu be able to accept her fate with Wenchang? Will Donghua return for his little fox?

Please also note that the depiction of Fengjiu and Donghua in this story may vary a lot from the original and what DongFeng is in your minds. Kindly proceed to read this story with caution.🌸🌸

The future queen of Qingqiu Kingdom, Bai Fengjiu, has an abundance of suitors, but does not believe in romance. Finding the immortal realm too dreary and serious, she steals off to the mortal realm. In the mortal realm, use of immortal magic is not recommended, due to the dangers of it fizzling and backfiring on the user.

One day, when a stranger rescues her from danger, she decides to do it the mortal way and find out who he is to repay his gratitude. But what happens when she falls in love with him instead?